International Operator

[pax]

First there is nothing.
Then comes one after another,
separately, but before anything else.

Together they make sense.
Combined, they make up
for all distances, from any longitude
to any latitude,
connecting two frightened voices.

The silence between
means as much as the tones themselves.

 

[ZeroDude]

It's nice but lacks the flow that is in some of your other stuff, but it's necessary to a good reading, not meaning to nitpick but I'm sure you realise this

 

[pax]

:: nods :: thanks for the feedback. It's really rough right now--I posted the first draft, which I rarely do.

 

[ZeroDude]

Yea, well sometimes the best come in the rough form in which you first right them down but it's equally true that some need work, but for a first draft it's really quite well written

 

[Tania]

You're onto another winner Pax