A new untitled piece

[pop_mofo]

Any feedback is appreciated. Here it is. I hope someone likes it

A disjointed train of thoughts
images going through my mind
Faces both happy & sad
Times shrouded
in mystery

But always you were there
A spirit
Guiding me
A watchful spirit

I feel you here today
and I begin to
feel at peace

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Well that's it. Any comments are welcome.

Thanks.

 

[ACROB@T]

nice pop_mofo..was there anymore to this poem?..just a nosey comment

A disjointed train of thoughts

..really like this line

 

[pop_mofo]

nice pop_mofo..was there anymore to this poem?..just a nosey comment

A disjointed train of thoughts

..really like this line

Thanks for the feedback. This is the entire poem. There was never anything more to it. it was one of those flashes of writing. I suddenly felt a surge and put it down in 5 minutes.

Just out of curiousity, why did you think there was something more?? Does it seem unfinished or incomplete? Please let me know.

Peace.

 

[foray]

pop_mofo, nice poem! And I rather liked that ------------------ that you put at the bottom, even tho it might not have been intended. But it went well with "peace" and... well... train tracks...


foray

 

[ACROB@T]

it was mainly my own assumptions based on the length of the poem.....simply an interest in any omissions that may have been made. That said at the end of the day its not necessarily my place to judge whether its incomplete, or unfinished..only the author really knows..