PopMartian33107
Acrobat
Hello. I tried pretty hard writing my first simple pop 'song', but the end result is a mess. It's not even finished yet! Maybe someone here could help me with the rest?
It's about a boy who constantly tries calling a girl, bugging her all the time, but by songs' finish, the tables have turned, and she's bothering him! Anyway, here it is...
I've been calling from the west
And dialing in the east.
You say you're often home
But you're always out of reach
Though you never gave me much,
I'm always seeking more.
With a stroke of the dial,
I can conjure up your smile,
But my passion superdcedes my self-control.
<chorus>
Nationwide!
Just call on me baby,
Please answer the phone.
You leave me nothing
And you always have to go.
Don't run from me baby,
There's nowhere to go.
Though I ask for you
The answer's always "no".
<end chorus>
From the Delaware to the Rockies,
From sea to shining sea.
You're never home,
Guess you must have found somebody.
Looking in the Yellow Pages,
Searching for a sound.
But it's never you,
I hear that same damn voice:
"This phone number cannot be found".
<chorus>
Nationwide!
That's all so far...how is it? No simple negative coments like 'you suck', constructive critcisim would be nice!
Thanks!
That's All...
It's about a boy who constantly tries calling a girl, bugging her all the time, but by songs' finish, the tables have turned, and she's bothering him! Anyway, here it is...
I've been calling from the west
And dialing in the east.
You say you're often home
But you're always out of reach
Though you never gave me much,
I'm always seeking more.
With a stroke of the dial,
I can conjure up your smile,
But my passion superdcedes my self-control.
<chorus>
Nationwide!
Just call on me baby,
Please answer the phone.
You leave me nothing
And you always have to go.
Don't run from me baby,
There's nowhere to go.
Though I ask for you
The answer's always "no".
<end chorus>
From the Delaware to the Rockies,
From sea to shining sea.
You're never home,
Guess you must have found somebody.
Looking in the Yellow Pages,
Searching for a sound.
But it's never you,
I hear that same damn voice:
"This phone number cannot be found".
<chorus>
Nationwide!
That's all so far...how is it? No simple negative coments like 'you suck', constructive critcisim would be nice!
Thanks!
That's All...