Mine sucks

[xtal]

You're like a scary carnival ride
thrilling and exciting and then...
can't wait to do you all over again
but this love's been lived in
and someone enjoyed every minute of it

my love
I do not charge gratuity
my love
I do not advertise
You've got me on backorder
I'm all paid up
but still waiting for more

My love depreciates
expires and is non-refundable
and cannot be used with any other promotion
I think I keep losing you
when you were never mine
I keep holding out for something better
and I'm totally missing out

You're a Stanley Kubrik kind of film
intense and mystifying
I could say I could love you out loud
Now would you know if I were lying

I walk away clean
I walk away strong
You walk away mean
thinking I'm the one wrong

 

[ZeroDude]

Interesting and makes you think about how a relationship could be so surreal yet straightforward in a relative sense, very good...........

 

[xtal]

I'm a bicycle
and you're my training wheel
You're temporary
but I need you still
You need to know
that I'm brilliant
with a whole lot of faults
I speak my name
and all I ever hear is my mother's old voice...
I love you back
but it'll never be enough
You always point out
all the bad stuff
Can you help me down this rocky road
can you be there
when I call you on the phone
Baby I'm a mess
and I don't know what to do
and I'm here just me, all alone
I feel all alone
but I'm surrounded by you
I can't out-run you
and I can't catch up
I have a feeling
that you wanna give up and leave me
I make you laugh
and I make you cry
I stress you out
yet I don't know why

 

[For Honor]

Relationships


Your writing is unclear, or maybe it's just me, but it sets a very interesting atmosphere. The struggle of happiness, of life, is very apparent there, and because of that sort of... purity, I think it's very respectable

good job