um ok i'm very new to this section of the forum
this poem deals with that ever so common, but never easy ordeal of rejection. I wrote it last night after actually being rejected. To be honest it's still in progress but i thought i'd share what i do have:
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My heart no longer beats
My mouth no longer speaks
Your eyes penetrate my soul
I stand before you gazed in awe
Why did you say those things to me,
Why did you sing that song,
My tired and withered body,
Could not stand, could not take anymore
Where she moves in for the kill
Where i crouch in coward despair
She takes a fatal swipe
My face in pain, it tears.
As you laugh, As you leave
As I crawl, as i bleed
When i fall to the abyss
caress me love, in pure bliss
When i draw my final breath
When i go to close my eyes
She'll embrace me in her arms,
We'll be together, once again
Won't we?
WON'T WE???!!!
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I'v also written some other poetry that isn't as bleak as this, i'll have to find and post it in due course
thanks for reading, any feedback would be great
this poem deals with that ever so common, but never easy ordeal of rejection. I wrote it last night after actually being rejected. To be honest it's still in progress but i thought i'd share what i do have:
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My heart no longer beats
My mouth no longer speaks
Your eyes penetrate my soul
I stand before you gazed in awe
Why did you say those things to me,
Why did you sing that song,
My tired and withered body,
Could not stand, could not take anymore
Where she moves in for the kill
Where i crouch in coward despair
She takes a fatal swipe
My face in pain, it tears.
As you laugh, As you leave
As I crawl, as i bleed
When i fall to the abyss
caress me love, in pure bliss
When i draw my final breath
When i go to close my eyes
She'll embrace me in her arms,
We'll be together, once again
Won't we?
WON'T WE???!!!
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I'v also written some other poetry that isn't as bleak as this, i'll have to find and post it in due course
thanks for reading, any feedback would be great