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travu2

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You can see a slight variation, a rivulet,
in the flowing skin like a buzzing
metropolis left in the sun.
Their timeless heads were imposed on the side.

You still go up to the backyard
to fill an empty water-dish.
The scattered remains of chalky toys
are like sputniks in the shade.

Old wind chimes lose their glow
in the patio where the visitors are
camouflaged. You slide open the glass door
and pad down the hallway to look for clothes.

They never could see you, so they don?t know
when you?ve slowed to a stop
at that same fast-food restaurant,
on your only stretch of freeway.

These happy workermen here in
the sky should build a house for you;
you think you?d melt in those shimmering pools;
the entire horizon is heaving.

Like a lost hummingbird you
barely sip a coconut shake.
That wavy blue wall of adobe houses
still has your name in its phone book.

And a seven-hour song is collecting
around the singer?s euphoric mirage,
just above the horizon where
one billion blue goldfish have been sedated.
 
Originally posted by travu2:


the entire horizon is heaving.

And a seven-hour song is collecting
around the singer?s euphoric mirage,
just above the horizon where
one billion blue goldfish have been sedated.

travu2, I really, really like your poems. They express very interesting ideas in an elegant way. In this poem I can feel the heat of a summer day when the picture your eyes see shimmers because it's so hot. (Not that we get a lot of those days here on Canada's Wet Coast!)
 
amazing imagery..

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wow, travu2, it must have taken you a long time to get that poem out. I agree with BG, amazing imagery... especially "the entire horizon is heaving." (this reminds me of an Elizabeth Jennings line that goes "day dawdled at my elbow")

"The scattered remains of chalky toys
are like sputniks in the shade." I am imagining a glowing pastel painting of children's toys.

"And a seven-hour song is collecting
around the singer?s euphoric mirage,
just above the horizon where
one billion blue goldfish have been sedated."

foray


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The story of life is quick as the wink of an eye; The story of love is hello and goodbye. --Jimi Hendrix
 
Thanks for the compliments guys. I really love the way imagery can be used to get the reader in a certain state of mind and get different feelings across, so it really feels good to read your nice comments about that.
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To quote one more line this timeless piece would only take away the glimmering sparks that now grace this wire of a conversation; but i can definately see this one being turned into a prayer...

Thank you for your beautiful imigary, simply priceless
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Wow, I love this poem...

"And a seven-hour song is collecting
around the singer?s euphoric mirage,"

and especially that bit. I know everyone's said it but the imagery is incredible...
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