Hey

youtooellen · 01-28-2009, 10:43 AM

Yes that is the title.

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hey, silence.
I thought I heard you there.
I wasn't sure if you wanted me to know.
can you tell me more?
I want to know you.
what happened to our future?
was this part of your plan?
hey, divine being.
won't you remind me why I'm here?
I can't see you.
I can't touch you.
I can't hear you.
are you everywhere?
just not here.
hey, kindness.
can you keep me warm tonight?
I want your mind.
let me wear your crown of thorns.
send me a sign.
nevermind.
you'll make me cry.
hey, happiness.
you're so dishonest.
why do you wallow in self-pity?
I can make your dreams come true.
if I tried.
hey, love.
you're bluer than any sky I've seen.
have you experienced me?
let me breath you in.
I'll teach you how to breathe.
hey, heart.
I knew you didn't die.
won't you let me hold you?
your beat is faint.
I'd like to stay and pry,
but I've got to put you down.
I make you orbit their lives.
follow me and I'll make it alright.
if you listen to me, we'll live tonight.

/end freestyle writing.

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I have a livejournal and I just freestyled. It's terribly truthful.

Shevy · 02-02-2009, 10:59 PM

Freestyle often produces terribly truthful writing...it's pretty cool ^_^

I'm blown away by how you've expressed so much with such simple wording. Thank-you for sharing this!

youtooellen · 02-03-2009, 09:37 AM

Thank you for your response! I really appreciate feedback on my writing and such.

01-28-2009, 10:43 AM	#1
youtooellen New Yorker Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 2,580 Local Time: 01:18 PM	Hey Yes that is the title. === hey, silence. I thought I heard you there. I wasn't sure if you wanted me to know. can you tell me more? I want to know you. what happened to our future? was this part of your plan? hey, divine being. won't you remind me why I'm here? I can't see you. I can't touch you. I can't hear you. are you everywhere? just not here. hey, kindness. can you keep me warm tonight? I want your mind. let me wear your crown of thorns. send me a sign. nevermind. you'll make me cry. hey, happiness. you're so dishonest. why do you wallow in self-pity? I can make your dreams come true. if I tried. hey, love. you're bluer than any sky I've seen. have you experienced me? let me breath you in. I'll teach you how to breathe. hey, heart. I knew you didn't die. won't you let me hold you? your beat is faint. I'd like to stay and pry, but I've got to put you down. I make you orbit their lives. follow me and I'll make it alright. if you listen to me, we'll live tonight. /end freestyle writing. === I have a livejournal and I just freestyled. It's terribly truthful. __________________

02-02-2009, 10:59 PM	#2
Shevy Babyface Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Canadaland Posts: 6 Local Time: 10:18 AM	Freestyle often produces terribly truthful writing...it's pretty cool ^_^ I'm blown away by how you've expressed so much with such simple wording. Thank-you for sharing this! __________________

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02-03-2009, 09:37 AM	#3
youtooellen New Yorker Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 2,580 Local Time: 01:18 PM	Thank you for your response! I really appreciate feedback on my writing and such.