popkidu2
War Child
I'm working on a song, it's not done, but I wanted some feedback (no pun intended
) on the lyrics. I haven't completely figured out the music yet...I keep shifting from a really hard rock song in the vein of Sugar or Cathering Wheel, to a nice acoustic one. Anyway, here are the incomplete lyrics. Tell me what you think.
"For A While"
For a while
I will believe
too many problems
for me too keep
All this shame
that I hide
broken bottles
in my dreams
CHORUS
So take this message for a while
Hold it tightly for a while
Darken rooms
in my head
open doors
beckon me in
See the ashes
in my heart
wasted feelings
on my lips
CHORUS
BRIDGE
And while I'm waiting for you to go
Don't tell me that I don't care
I can't hold on forever
But just for a little while...
2000 Nick Swogger
"For A While"
For a while
I will believe
too many problems
for me too keep
All this shame
that I hide
broken bottles
in my dreams
CHORUS
So take this message for a while
Hold it tightly for a while
Darken rooms
in my head
open doors
beckon me in
See the ashes
in my heart
wasted feelings
on my lips
CHORUS
BRIDGE
And while I'm waiting for you to go
Don't tell me that I don't care
I can't hold on forever
But just for a little while...
2000 Nick Swogger