Screwtape2
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That right now, Diemen is doing what Diemen does best: owning people who are out of their depth.
If you stop to listen to me you'll see I'm right.
That right now, Diemen is doing what Diemen does best: owning people who are out of their depth.
Indeed he is. I'd like to think I'm helping out a bit, too.
Is it good? Is it revealing of the characters? Will it make people think about their own beliefs?
If you stop to listen to me you'll see I'm egotistical.
Nope.
I'm not sure I can really answer that, not being someone with much of a grasp of the medium. I feel like the conversation is stilted and contrived, but that's a quality I associate with comics in general.
Fixed.
I don't know why I'm posting in there anymore, honestly. It's something I feel compelled by, I guess.
Reading the comic now, Screwy. First suggestion though, none of these characters are actually speaking to each other. They're all spouting off these aphoristic phrases on how to improve the world. I like the idea you have here and I'm sure it would translate better with the artwork intact, but there's absolutely no subtlety to the dialogue. Perhaps it's intentional, but it's coming off as heavy-handed.
I know, since you're ignoring most of my responses.
They are, but in a pulpy, tongue-in-cheek, cavalier sort of way.
Screwy, what are you trying to go for here?
I don't know why I'm posting in there anymore, honestly. It's something I feel compelled by, I guess.
Reading the comic now, Screwy. First suggestion though, none of these characters are actually speaking to each other. They're all spouting off these aphoristic phrases on how to improve the world. I like the idea you have here and I'm sure it would translate better with the artwork intact, but there's absolutely no subtlety to the dialogue. Perhaps it's intentional, but it's coming off as heavy-handed.
Screwtape, you just don't get it. You're wrong. Everyone sees that. You're clearly out of your depth, but go ahead. I'm not sure if it's out of pig-headedness, arrogance or sheer naivete, but keep on trying. It'll only confirm everyone's thoughts more.
I have become rather convinced that anybody who boldly proclaims "I am right! I know I am right!" is actually going to turn out to be wrong a lot of the time, because such a proclamation is so lacking in nuance that it indicates the individual's own analysis is going to lack nuance too.
But shall we not drag the other thread's argument in here?
So have you listened to my DI list yet, Ax?
Okay, that makes sense, but it comes off as incredibly self-righteous and heavy-handed. You're not giving these characters any individuality or defining traits - it was 3 pages and I had a hard time following who was saying what. People like Alan Moore can delve into these sorts of questions and philosophies through their comics and world they create. This comes off more like the author speaking directly to me. It doesn't go anywhere, or at least you're ideas aren't transferring well onto paper. And where did Mephisto's Realm come into play? As a reader, I don't like seeing the writer force his view onto me that severely, but if it was introduced into the dialogue/story with subtlety, then it's all good in da 'hood.
I didn't like reading this, but it's cool that you're trying.
If you all would stop to listen to me you would see I am right. It is that simply. Call me arrogant and whatever else you want because believe me I have been called worse here. I know I am right.
Ooh shit, no. Will you be around much longer today?
I am going to re-write it. Thanks for the analysis. It has been very helpful.
Yeah for a few hours, probably.
Righto. I'm going out grocery shopping soon (ugh), but if you're around when I get back, I might as well give it a spin and do a running diary.
Otherwise, there's always tomorrow.
You're welcome, I'm glad I could help. Did you see my post about Godot?
Yeah. I'll check it out. I'm going to work on the dialouge this weekend when I'm at my aunt's. Again, thanks for the help.
No problemo.
I think you'll really like Godot. That, Thornton Wilder's Our Town, and Woody Allen's fucking awesome Annie Hall have been pretty influential to me as I've been developing my new idea for a play.
hey screwy, how's it going? quick question, and this isn't meant to be insulting or anything, it's entirely honest.
i've noticed when you get into arguments with people, you are very inclined to stand your ground, which, has it's perks and flaws. but you get upset and offended when people don't agree with you. yet, when others ask you to consider another perspective, you tell them they are wrong and you are right.
why are you so inclined to isolate yourself from others instead of reach out to them? and i know this isn't always the case. we've had some nice exchanges here, you and i. but when it comes to a discussion with disagreements, i feel as though you climb up to a pedestal, sit atop, and look down on us, then get sad and feel alone. when you were the one who climbed!
that's just an observation. what do you think about that?
hey screwy, how's it going? quick question, and this isn't meant to be insulting or anything, it's entirely honest.
i've noticed when you get into arguments with people, you are very inclined to stand your ground, which, has it's perks and flaws. but you get upset and offended when people don't agree with you. yet, when others ask you to consider another perspective, you tell them they are wrong and you are right.
why are you so inclined to isolate yourself from others instead of reach out to them? and i know this isn't always the case. we've had some nice exchanges here, you and i. but when it comes to a discussion with disagreements, i feel as though you climb up to a pedestal, sit atop, and look down on us, then get sad and feel alone. when you were the one who climbed!
that's just an observation. what do you think about that?
Speaking of influential things, I've found the biggest influence on my own writing has actually been music. I think the only author who I would identify as strongly influential on my fiction writing would be Fyodor Dostoevsky.