Crystal

[zooropamanda]

Of all the places I fear to tread
is the one place I long to be
Twisted fidelities upon my head
scarred shallow sorrows embrace me

to walk within your rhyming step
and lay my faults upon your feet
hopeful in my mind's one repent
my crystal method too indiscreet.

Allowing you beyond this veil
of crystal doors and colours spin,
to open up my shackled wounds
and touch my very songless sins.

with every moment you dont
see me,
every moment that you
walk away,
breaks a piece inside
to be crystalised upon that door.

 

[hermes]

I liked the last verse quite a bit, cool piece.

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Steve
SAME OLD STORY- Hardcore American Comedy

 

[The Wanderer]

your poetry has always touched my soul, well, but how is that any different from everything else you do?



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For the eyeing of my scars, there is a charge
For the hearing of my heart---
It really goes.

And there is a charge, a very large charge
For a word or a touch
Or a bit of blood

-Sylvia Plath

 

[zooropamanda]

still warm with her grace

 

[ACROB@T]

Of all the places I fear to tread
is the one place I long to be
Twisted fidelities upon my head
scarred shallow sorrows embrace me

 

[BabyGrace]

Allowing you beyond this veil
of crystal doors and colours spin,
to open up my shackled wounds
and touch my very songless sins.

every poem you write I love more and more..Manda, you?re one of my very favourite poets and I hope you?ve considered publishing so more people can read what you have to share

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but for the grace of love I'd will the meaning of heaven from above...

 

[Achtung_Bebe]

Originally posted by zooropamanda:
with every moment you dont
see me,
every moment that you
walk away,
breaks a piece inside
to be crystalised upon that door.

*sigh* I love your stuff. It seems you always have a reason for writing the way you do. The choppy ending puts emphasis on the breaking of pieces "to be crystalised upon that door." Perhaps this was unintentional, but what can I say, I notice those rhythm patterns... perhaps overanalyze them now and again

Nice work manda.

 

[Bacchus]

Originally posted by zooropamanda:

Allowing you beyond this veil
of crystal doors and colours spin,
to open up my shackled wounds
and touch my very songless sins.

simply beautiful, love surround. Thank you zoomanda!! i'm speechless..