Simple Lyric Re-Write Project #1: Electrical Storm

[One Tree Still]

"...night is heavy, heavy as a truck...we need the rain to wash away our bad luck..."

could read

"...night is heavy, heavy like a truck...when will the rain wash away the bad luck?"

 

[celia]

lol, you remind me of my english teacher

 

[beegee]

either way, the lyric still sucks.

 

[dlihcraw]

“Electrical Storm” is a powerful song that examines the misfortunes and triumphs of an intimate relationship between two lovers in very simplistic and analogous language. To remove the pronouns "we" and "our" from the lyric mentioned is to help make the song impersonal and irrelevant to its own message. The specificity of "like" distracts the song from achieving an emotional flow. "As" extends to the song a more natural way of speech and thought, creating a more realistic tone in the narrator's voice and enhancing overall appreciation for the song from listeners.

In short, I disagree wholeheartedly!

 

[meital]

“Electrical Storm” is a powerful song that examines the misfortunes and triumphs of an intimate relationship between two lovers in very simplistic and analogous language

I agree with you!
I think it is one of the best love song. i love the lyrics and wouldn't change them!

 

[Inner El Guapo]

night is heavy as fuck.....that works for me

 

[UnforgettableLemon]

I thought it was "air" not "night" Also, IEG, I thought the same thing when I heard it for the first few... ever

 

[steak]

I thought it was "heavy as a drug"

 

[Scorpionac]

I thought it was "heavy as a drug"

That would have worked.

Or maybe "the air is heavy, heavy and we're stuck".

Such a bad line in such a great song.

 

[bono_212]

M-m-m-megabump!

 

[Galeongirl]

Wow 7 years. That has to be a record!

 

[Gynoid]

I thought it was "heavy as a drug"

I also always understood "drug". I would not change it though, not the best line, sure, but not the worst either.