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Old 06-06-2008, 07:56 PM   #331
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Find The River is one of the most beautiful songs ever.

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^^^^ maybe both would be good?

^ see you again soon

^^^ Screwtape are you willing to read the first couple of chapters of a story I wrote and give me an opinion?
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Of course.
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No Way Out of the Mind- FictionPress.com

Thanks, there's a link to the first chapter (well I hope that's what it leads to ) , and you can get to the second chapter from there too. It's not great, maybe not even good but I just enjoyed writing it, and the characters.
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Thanks, there's a link to the first chapter (well I hope that's what it leads to ) , and you can get to the second chapter from there too. It's not great, maybe not even good but I just enjoyed writing it, and the characters.
It wasn't bad. It was subtle. Overall it did leave me feeling anything. A good first and second chapter should evoke something out of you. It was good though. I'm glad you had fun writing it.
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^ Yeah I understand where you're coming from there, and I guess maybe that's due to the fact that I more have characters in my mind than an actual story.

A lot of things like the character jumping are there because it's just how I'm writing it and I maybe decide to change that when I have more of the story together.

I just finished a third chapter, well I'm reading over it now and adding small bits to it and rewriting little bits, it's a little shorter than the second but longer than the first; I think I'm probably gonna stick to writing it in short chapters.
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^ Yeah I understand where you're coming from there, and I guess maybe that's due to the fact that I more have characters in my mind than an actual story.

A lot of things like the character jumping are there because it's just how I'm writing it and I maybe decide to change that when I have more of the story together.
I think it is great that characters are so important to you because really they are the most important thing in a story. I'll take great characters over great plot any day.
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^ I think it will be mostly about the characters for a few chapters, I guess that will probably have a side-effect of making the story feel a little slow and not easy to get into. I'll probably add a Prologue to the start eventually of something a lot more, I don't know eye-catching and even though I have an idea for it, I don't want to write it until the story gets there, just to make sure it doesn't appear as being out of place. That's kinda how I have the story in my mind, I just have certain scenes and I'm trying to find a way to link them all together and an order too.

I kinda had a problem in Secondary School of writing short-stories that became so dialogue heavy that the end of the story would seem to be awfully rushed just so I could finish it; and I guess what I like about just writing for myself is that there's no deadline I can write as much as I want the way I want it.
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Old 06-06-2008, 10:01 PM   #341
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Let's play a game

Grapes Red Seedless - 4499
Grapes Green Seedless - 4022
Cantaloupe - 4050
Celery - 4060
Broccoli - 4070
Asparagus - 4080
Bananas - 4011

^ How's the writing going?
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^ is this game called, type the serial codes of fruits and veg from where Dani works?

It's going okay, I finished Chapter 3 and have wrote about 600 or so words of Chapter 4
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^ Yes. And sadly, that's everything I know.

That's good.
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Grapes Red Seedless - 4499
Grapes Green Seedless - 4022
Cantaloupe - 4050
Celery - 4060
Broccoli - 4070
Asparagus - 4080
Bananas - 4011

^ How's the writing going?
Are these codes international or something because Bananas are 4011 here too?
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I have a feeling they are. Or maybe it's a North American thing. John, are there any bananas in your house that you want to check for stickers?
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