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Old 08-18-2008, 11:19 PM   #1
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Question for people from english speaking countries!

I know this may be a bit silly for you but it is important for me. Can anyone tell me if the following two lines are correct:

Don't be an accomplice.

Don't be its accomplice.

What comes before those lines is: Living In the streets is a crime.

I must know if the grammar on those two lines are correct. If any of them is. It's very important for me. I hope someone can help me. Thank you.
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Old 08-18-2008, 11:32 PM   #2
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you should pm beav. he likes to be critcal about that stuff.
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Old 08-18-2008, 11:34 PM   #3
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An accomplice, I believe.

It should be Living "in" the streets is a crime, too... jus' sayin'.
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Is it a verse of something? can you post the few lines before?
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Old 08-19-2008, 12:49 AM   #5
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I think they're both a bit wrong. The second one definitely is--you can't be an accomplice TO a crime. You can only be an accomplice to someone else who COMMITTED the crime, i.e. the perpetrator.

I understand the idea behind putting these sentences together, but even the first one is a bit strange because you're mentioning the crime, and telling the reader not to be part of the "problem" of homelessness, but you're not really saying who the main perpetrator of the crime is. Society?

There's got to be a clearer way to phrase that idea. Like "Life on the streets is a crime. Don't be a silent witness". That's a little wobbly too, but you see what I mean?


And YLB, did you mean to say "on" instead of "in"? Because you didn't even correct anything.
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Old 08-19-2008, 03:03 AM   #6
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If you want to be ultra-technical, then no, you can't be an accomplice to a crime. But hell everyone uses that anyway. I'd say the first one's fine, but what's wrong with living on the streets?
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Old 08-19-2008, 07:16 AM   #7
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I think they're both a bit wrong. The second one definitely is--you can't be an accomplice TO a crime. You can only be an accomplice to someone else who COMMITTED the crime, i.e. the perpetrator.

I understand the idea behind putting these sentences together, but even the first one is a bit strange because you're mentioning the crime, and telling the reader not to be part of the "problem" of homelessness, but you're not really saying who the main perpetrator of the crime is. Society?

There's got to be a clearer way to phrase that idea. Like "Life on the streets is a crime. Don't be a silent witness". That's a little wobbly too, but you see what I mean?


And YLB, did you mean to say "on" instead of "in"? Because you didn't even correct anything.
YLB changed it from "In" to "in".

Also, perhaps it would be better to say an "accessory" rather than an accomplice.
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Why is Living in the streets a crime? Like homeless people? Don't they have enough to worry about without having to be told that their way of lie = their very existence - is a crime?
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And YLB, did you mean to say "on" instead of "in"? Because you didn't even correct anything.
I think it's Living "in" the streets... but Life "on" the streets.

And it's Don't be an accomplice.
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Old 08-19-2008, 11:32 AM   #10
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I think it's Living "in" the streets... but Life "on" the streets.

And it's Don't be an accomplice.
regional dialect regarding "in" v "on", i do believe.

much like "at" the weekend v "on" the weekend.

regardless, brazilianfly, your english is very good. you should be proud.
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Old 08-19-2008, 12:27 PM   #11
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I don't know how you live "in" a street, unless they poured the asphalt and tar over you while they were working on it. Seems pretty clear to me.

And as for Beav's comment, it's not saying that homeless people are criminals, but that the society allowing people to be homeless is guilty of putting (or keeping) them there.
Of course, your interpretation is just another reason why neither sentence really works grammatically.
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Old 08-19-2008, 12:29 PM   #12
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I don't know how you live "in" a street, unless they poured the asphalt and tar over you while they were working on it. Seems pretty clear to me.

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YLB changed it from "In" to "in".

Also, perhaps it would be better to say an "accessory" rather than an accomplice.
Yes, that's what I was going for. Apart from that, I'm not sure how else to help with the sentence.
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No, 'cybering' does not mean what you think it means.
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Thank you for the answers everybody! Those are not verses by the way, they are for an ad I made in college and I have to send them to an American School for admission and I must have it in English. It's an ad I made for Amnesty International about homeless people living in the streets. Now I am in doubt between "don't be an accomplice" and "don't be an accessory"... I understand the first on may be wrong but if people do say it than maybe that makes it ok in this case... I don't think they are going to judge me too much based on the grammar from that line but on the entire ad, still I would like to be sure. Gotta make up my mind now...

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regardless, brazilianfly, your english is very good. you should be proud.
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