two birds flying from a cage during a hurricane

the tourist · 10-12-2005, 03:26 PM

the world was beautiful
so calm, through the eye of the storm,
morning light appearing
after the coldest of winter nights during these times of darkness;
the decay was evident, bent round the glossy slip and slide of a flower-vase turned into a wine-jar.
skewed and lengthened, fattened and twisted.
the clarity in the center beating crimson like a heartbeat,
skinny-skipping through the caffeine glue of midnight madness, awakened by the dripping of cold sweat from saline dreams.
and by the table the wilting flowers fall silent to the floor, water cascading after them,
broken glass
cuts up your slippered feet as you wander through your waking dream,
but the world was beautiful and you knew it.
the past mistakes that everyone makes fade from view as oceans blue collect sand for pleasure.
buried treasure, dusty and uncovered,
the world behind the eyes of green
with reflected blue.
without perfection; darkened; distant; and set apart.
to be beautiful separately.

For Honor · 10-12-2005, 04:54 PM

^nice

A new beginning lays before us all.....

wizard2c · 10-14-2005, 10:25 PM

Very well written.

carol
wizard2c

lazarus · 10-17-2005, 02:37 AM

love it. repeat readings only enhance the work. I'm going to highlight one line in particular that I think is just fantastic:

"the decay was evident, bent round the glossy slip and slide of a flower-vase turned into a wine-jar."

that's great fucking writing, a line you know hasn't been written before by anyone.

thank you

the tourist · 10-17-2005, 02:01 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by lazarus
thank you

You're welcome. It's a line that my mind could only come up with sitting in downtown Seattle, half asleep at 2 a.m. eating McDonald's french-fries after leaving my girlfriend's apartment (but before returning to my car).

10-12-2005, 03:26 PM	#1
the tourist Blue Crack Addict Join Date: Dec 2003 Posts: 27,919 Local Time: 03:47 AM	two birds flying from a cage during a hurricane the world was beautiful so calm, through the eye of the storm, morning light appearing after the coldest of winter nights during these times of darkness; the decay was evident, bent round the glossy slip and slide of a flower-vase turned into a wine-jar. skewed and lengthened, fattened and twisted. the clarity in the center beating crimson like a heartbeat, skinny-skipping through the caffeine glue of midnight madness, awakened by the dripping of cold sweat from saline dreams. and by the table the wilting flowers fall silent to the floor, water cascading after them, broken glass cuts up your slippered feet as you wander through your waking dream, but the world was beautiful and you knew it. the past mistakes that everyone makes fade from view as oceans blue collect sand for pleasure. buried treasure, dusty and uncovered, the world behind the eyes of green with reflected blue. without perfection; darkened; distant; and set apart. to be beautiful separately. __________________

10-12-2005, 04:54 PM	#2
For Honor Rock n' Roll Doggie VIP PASS Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: East Coast, USA Posts: 5,278 Local Time: 05:47 AM	^nice A new beginning lays before us all..... __________________

10-14-2005, 10:25 PM	#3
wizard2c Refugee Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Florida Posts: 1,580 Local Time: 10:47 AM	reply Very well written. carol wizard2c

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10-17-2005, 02:37 AM	#4
lazarus Blue Crack Supplier Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Los Angeles, California Posts: 42,037 Local Time: 02:47 AM	love it. repeat readings only enhance the work. I'm going to highlight one line in particular that I think is just fantastic: "the decay was evident, bent round the glossy slip and slide of a flower-vase turned into a wine-jar." that's great fucking writing, a line you know hasn't been written before by anyone. thank you