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BabyGrace

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I'm saying these words so softly
and I hope you might not hear them
you brushed the hazards off my tongue
you're cold, you can't hear

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the calm is smooth as glass
not longing, not wanting to touch
the efferent peace of this hour
hangs waiting for the fall

a head hung, a word lost
a careless list of trivialities
not including you
an ominous rumble betrays the clouds

the birds scurry to make their shelter
held true to turn away
to forget and lose your way
as the black begins to roll in

sighing mournfully and raising pitch now
you're uncovered, weak and small
in the sights and in the same, nowhere
the first heavy drops spiral to earth

with a crash that shakes the foundations
you begin to fight and find you're alone
the often tried footing gives way
a chilling flash illuminates the hunter's fury

raging ceaselessly, or so it seems
as the day dies and eternal night descends
demons howl their tormented anguish
the violent forces smash, drag you under

with a subtle lessening the beast moves on
revealing a limp form, sodden and lifeless
not you anymore, you're gone
the heavens open and unleash the deluge

time marches on, grey and forgotten
but this rain is here to stay
I wonder where you are
and where the hell was I?
 
with a subtle lessening the beast moves on
revealing a limp form, sodden and lifeless
not you anymore, you're gone
the heavens open and unleash the deluge

time marches on, grey and forgotten
but this rain is here to stay
I wonder where you are
and where the hell was I?

i dunno what to say really.......

i'm not sure what you're referring to, but it definately connects with an event in my life......

great as usual
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You are quite good at this arent you Miss Grace?

She certainly is.
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I love this one. I think you do an amazing job of using the storm to create a certain atmosphere that stays with the reader through the entire poem.

Originally posted by BabyGrace:

a head hung, a word lost
a careless list of trivialities
not including you
an ominous rumble betrays the clouds

the birds scurry to make their shelter
held true to turn away
to forget and lose your way
as the black begins to roll in

Originally posted by BabyGrace:

time marches on, grey and forgotten
but this rain is here to stay
I wonder where you are
and where the hell was I?
 
Babygrace! You are an awesome poet! This one is blowing my mind. I do believe I will have to print this one out and read it a few times tomorrow. I have had a few too many drinks tonight to be able to interpret this one! (friend's all day 30th b-day party) Yikes!
 
Originally posted by BabyGrace:

with a crash that shakes the foundations
you begin to fight and find you're alone
the often tried footing gives way
a chilling flash illuminates the hunter's fury

Holy shite, if you'll pardon my language... this has SO much power... I feel that sort of power in thunderstorms and gale force winds, you've really captured the relentless energy there...
"You begin to fight and find you're alone"
I think I've been there...


time marches on, grey and forgotten
but this rain is here to stay
I wonder where you are
and where the hell was I?

...and I've definately been here. Absolutely awesome, BabyGrace... ouch. It does hurt...
 
WOW. What can I say. Not sure what to quote. Not sure what to say. Within the context of my life, this just blows me away, Definitely can relate to this. Thanks for your words.

majxtc (majestic)


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And love is not the easy thing... The only baggage you can bring... Is all that you can't leave behind.
 
do you realize, you keep elevating yourself with each poem to a point where I wonder how on earth you could write this well, and I think of how much will pass before your eyes in the upcoming years of your life and I don't think there is a limit for you

dream out loud

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