"slug"

[The Wanderer]

"slug"

the wind
pulling the air
as it flips the sky
and empties the sun

drags me along
plastered earth
stings my belly
scraping in vain

to hide from the sun
and what is slick and smooth
never wanted this touch
already drying up

in the warm stroke
of the flickering glow
soft clouds diminish
and spill the light

time is my only prayer

thru traffic,
sidewalks...
no shelter,
if you're looking for rain

you might as well be a slug

 

[zooropamanda]

time is my only prayer

so, turn it into your own

 

[UpwiththeSun]

I really like your poetry. I am new and have been trying to read everybody's poems. This one is awesome!

 

[scatteroflight]

Originally posted by The Wanderer:

the wind
pulling the air
as it flips the sky
and empties the sun

This is a very vivid image. It's a poem for a dull gray unhappy day but it's still vivid.

 

[BabyGrace]

I really admire your purpose and direction in writing.

this may sound weird but try reading the last word of every line you wrote...very interesting effect; it's almost like a poem itself..

sorry to mutilate your writing.

 

[The Wanderer]

thanks y'all!

interesting suggestion BG, it's weird actually how the last word of each line seem to make that effect, very coincidental