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[The Wanderer]

to day dream,sleep
in...keep for
sake may
be have
an op end
<---------heart----->
worth more
than more
scatter your
love [in] love..........[in] love
just as
you we'
re: perfect

 

[popkidu2]

just as
you we'
re: perfect

 

[Blue_Angel]

well Im starting to figure out the syntax of this (actually I confess that I like to put your poetry into normal sentences without the line breaks to help me 'figure it out' cos Im not quite smart enough to do it otherwise) but I am still not clear what you're getting at (which is not a bad thing!!). funny, I am listening to Elbow right now as I read this. I really, really love them.

anywho, very clever, thank you for giving us stuff to puzzle over and think about

 

[foray]

Eh... don't mind me, I'm just thinking aloud.


today, dream,sleep
in... keep forsake
maybe have an opened heart
worth more than more
scatter your
love [in] love..........[in] love
just as you were:
perfect


to daydream, sleep in
keep for
sake may
be have
an operation to end the
heart
worth more than more
scatter your
love [in] love..........[in] love
just as
you we
regarding: perfect




foray

 

[The Wanderer]

yeah, something like that foray, except not really the regarding perfect, but

just as you,
we are perfect

or

just as we are:
perfect

just playing around, trying to do something a little different than I'm used to... sorry, there's no deep meaning to unravel!

 

[foray]

It was exciting reading it.
Sorry about my previous post.


foray

 

[Cowgirl]

if u stop trying to figure it out and just read it, it actually runs really quickly off the tongue.
clever