/-Reborn-/

[Mullen4Prez]

/-Reborn-/

I think I’ve Had enough
I’m Done, Just washed up
I want this now
Just give me the chance

And I’ll take you out
I can create myself
Again my perfect image
I can be Reborn, Reborn

I said I’m gonna be reborn
See my friend, I need this
Chance just once,
Go back to the past

Lets see how you last
Give me the chance
And I’ll kick your ass

I’ll Show you my way
The hypocrites will see
How quickly I change
Its so dynamic

Lets get physical
I’ll take ya out
Because I need this chance
And then….

I’m Reborn, Reborn, Reborn
Don’t think about it
Just give it to me
I’m desperate

One Chance, One life
Just to be taken by a knife
And now its that time
TO get Reborn.

 

[ZeroDude]

All Because Of You I'm getting reminded of here, but its pretty simplistic yet fine in its own right, I find that some of the lines are there just because they rhyme however if I look into the last 4 lines abit you've hit on a pro- suicide agenda/ actually reincarnation physical instead of a rebirth of the mind

One Chance, One life
Just to be taken by a knife
And now its that time
TO get Reborn.

Now anyone saying One Life in a poem/ song has something coming to them, it has potential imo just give it a bit of a tweaking

 

[Mullen4Prez]

Thanks man

 

[ZeroDude]

No problem I'm just trying to make this a great place for people to develop their lyrical skills including myself