Rain on my soul

[zooropamanda]

distorted memories and photograph trees
watchful the sky
within you I sleep

'love wont find its own way home'
a clown forever more
crying crystal tears

peaceful the night
what does it give into?
a soul with no home

no standing alone
together the moments fade
into a storm of doubt

you know my inner threat
diamond shores drowning my heart
laughter only brings more rain

rain on my soul
i love the way you talk to me
i love the way you walk on me
love the way you rain on my soul


*ZooManda rereads that piece of shite and notes down need for major reworking*

 

[Alisaura]

*mutters to self* And she calls ME self-deprecating!
*grabs zooManda and looks her in the eye* That not shite! That good stuff... and I admire you for posting it if you think it's that bad!

 

[Loafer]

lol alisaura! I agree with you wholeheartedly!

Zooropamanda, this is great, it flows really well. I love the last stanza.(is that what the different sections of lines are called? stanzas?)
I think i'll go read this poem again!

 

[The Wanderer]

a clown forever more
crying crystal tears
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a soul with no home
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you know my inner threat
diamond shores drowning my heart
laughter only brings more rain

rain on my soul

*Wanderer thinks zooropamanda's poetry is raining on his soul*

that poem is beautiful...

 

[zooropamanda]

Are you guys nuts?

I wrote that in about 5 minutes. Man...

but Im growing, look!

THANK YOU

 

[Achtung_Bebe]

5 minutes?

Wow, great job Zoomanda, you've captured a lot in 5 minutes

 

[zooropamanda]

i told some fibs about this piece

it actually means a lot to me

and I pull it up because i think its fitting i include it in my reminiscing.

 

[Bacchus]

Bacchus slaps Zoomanda around a bit with a large trout!

never ever sell yourself short girl, this is a wonderful peace...

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"I don't want to be the bleeding hearts club here, but you can't close your eyes to what's going on in the world. But you want to hopefully make a music that tries to transcend that and lift yourself and, if you're lucky, other people out of that." -- Bono, 1997

 

[bicyclingfish]

ah, the crazy things we do...

I really like this poem.

"rain on my soul
i love the way you talk to me
i love the way you walk on me
love the way you rain on my soul"

hmm... I would think the phrase "rain on my soul" negative, but where I live it rains too much for my taste. I guess a person in the desert would look forward to some rain on their soul, eh?. I wanna be in the desert now. Thanks Amanda.

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Come on, come on! Be good to me...