My first attempts at poetry

[~LadyLemon~]

I'm taking a creative writing class now, and although I've always wanted to be a writer, I've never been into writing poetry. Well since I have to write them for the first half of the semester, I've been giving them a shot.

Here is the first one I worote last week; it's about seeing U2 in Chicago:

Chicago

Most people would think we were crazy
I guess we are
But crazy in a good way

The sun wasn?t even up yet but we were waiting
On a cold October morning
5 a.m. Chicago

We were here for the love of music and Our band
For another mind-blowing show
A religious experience

Inside the arena, finally, we are in the second row
I breathe a sigh of relief
I can feel my hands again

Before they come out, we are so excited, so anxious
We dance to the P.A. music
I could almost puke

We are so high right now; I wouldn?t be anywhere else
They play so passionately
We connect?an orgy of souls

?One? is so bittersweet; we cry seeing those names
It brings to mind TV images
Burning buildings and crying families

He saw our signs; we were still wiping away tears
Reaching out he gave us the drumsticks
We floated out of the arena

Sad and rainy, the ride home was like a hangover
Although my eyes did close
I haven?t stopped smiling


Yeah, it's kind of juvenile, but whatever. This second poem is about my mom's ex boyfriend who lived with me for 12 years and did his best to fuck me up royally:

Forgiveness

Why did you pick me?
I was still a child
That was a hard time for me
And you made it hell

Twelve years you spoiled for me
What did I do to deserve that?
Sure, its turned me into a stronger person
But one who yearns for continual acceptance

I was puzzled when you were nice to me
But that was far and in between
Instead you got drunk every night
And emotionally ripped me to bits

She wondered why I was so unhappy
Why don?t you smile more?
Well why should I?
There?s nothing to smile about

She wished I could just be happy for her
If I can?t be happy for me
How can I be happy for you?
Why can?t you realize what he?s doing?

I?ll never forget the day of senior prom
I told him to go fuck himself
She made me apologize
I did, but I didn?t mean it

Their argument woke me up
?She?s worthless. A piece of shit!?
I made a final confrontation
A night I?ll never forget

Those days are long gone now
But the words are still inside my head
I know I?m a good person; one with ?potential?
But people have to remind me of that

Now she realizes what she?s done
She cries and offers apologies
At first I couldn?t accept them
But now I know she means it.

I forgive you, mom.


Hope you liked them Wannabe!

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You will believe in me
And I can never be ignored

 

[LarryMullen's POPAngel]

 

[wannabe]

You have so many lines that make these amazing!

Lines from Chicago:
A religious experience


We connect?an orgy of souls

I can feel my hands again

We floated out of the arena

Sad and rainy, the ride home was like a hangover
Although my eyes did close
I haven?t stopped smiling

Then out of Forgiveness:
Why did you pick me?

Their argument woke me up
?She?s worthless. A piece of shit!?
I made a final confrontation
A night I?ll never forget

But now I know she means it.

Really incredible words Kristina, I really enjoyed them. Thank you for taking the time and posting those, they were great.

btw, it's interesting who's up at 5am!

 

[~LadyLemon~]

Originally posted by wannabe:
You have so many lines that make these amazing!

Thank you so much Matt! I really appreciate hearing that, especially from a fellow writer. I'd love to read anything that you've written, and if I do anything else I like I'll send them your way!

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You will believe in me
And I can never be ignored

 

[Mrs. Edge]

Finally! Poetry I understand!!