la di da

[BabyGrace]

so could I fall on my knees
might you listen then?
or would you just grind me
further down

I watch these butterflies dance
and how I wish I could
be like that
so free and weightless

not bound by the strings
of your love
what are you afraid of?
that I might realize who I am
and leave your cruel comfort behind?

hold me tighter
make me blinder
feed me the poison
lead me barefoot through the fire
make me a mystery
so no one can touch me

my glance is distracted by the stillness
the air has grown thick
the bushes are filled with empty cocoons
and broken butterfly wings litter the ground

for Jan-Michael

 

[scatteroflight]

Originally posted by BabyGrace:

make me a mystery
so no one can touch me

my glance is distracted by the stillness
the air has grown thick
the bushes are filled with empty cocoons
and broken butterfly wings litter the ground

I love your endings. They are always the most powerful part of your poems and I think that's how it should be--the last words left echoing in the reader's mind.

Hope you're not suffering too much

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A place that has to be believed to be seen...

 

[Bonochick]

BabyGrace~

That brought tears to my eyes...absolutely beautiful...I love the imagery it provokes.

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"I Can Lose Myself, You I Can't Live Without"

 

[Salome]

Originally posted by BabyGrace:
not bound by the strings
of your love
what are you afraid of?
that I might realize who I am
and leave your cruel comfort behind?

cruel comfort
beautiful, but heartbreaking

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Salome
Shake it, shake it, shake it

 

[zooropamanda]

 

[brettig]

I see youve done an Achtung Baby here...title to detract from the heavy material u cover...with utter mastery it must be said. You ARE a writer

Yes im still looking for inspiration...

 

[The Wanderer]

wow nikki, all i can say is WOW


make me a mystery
so no one can touch me

sublime...

 

[BabyGrace]

thank you so much to all
you're always far too complimentary but i appreciate it

i'm ok scattero, the relationship probabyl didnt come accross clearly with what i wrote but i feel so badly for this kid..imagine having your dad come out and say he's gay one day and not long after die of AIDS. how he's dealing with it i don't know and i can't think of any way to help. i don't even have any right to be talking about this probably but i am for the same reason i was writing, because im not sure what to do

and probably there isnt anything

 

[The Wanderer]

God...

I'm very sorry to hear about that, AIDS has killed so many, and so many families... as Bono was saying in the last night of Elevation in the US, almost half the population of Afrika is infected with HIV and if you think about that, it also means that a generation of kids will grow up without parents, sisters, brothers, uncles, aunts, grandparents, cousins... imagine finding out that half your family had HIV and knowing that the medical advancements that are available in the West are not available to these people -- they will die very quickly and leave behind so many

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we hear their heartbeat, we hear their hearts beat...
see their tears fall in the rain

 

[BabyGrace]

say a prayer

 

[scatteroflight]

Originally posted by BabyGrace:

hold me tighter
make me blinder
feed me the poison
lead me barefoot through the fire
make me a mystery
so no one can touch me

my glance is distracted by the stillness
the air has grown thick
the bushes are filled with empty cocoons
and broken butterfly wings litter the ground

It's terribly sad that something so tragic inspired this, but I have to say again how much I'm impressed by this poem, especially the last two stanzas--beyond amazing, just beautiful.



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A place that has to be believed to be seen...