i see you

[popkidu2]

i see you
i know you see me
we used to talk
it used to be true

the colors were bright
one and the same
lifting our hearts
beyond the night

be my horizen
drift with the tide
take this letter
from all that i hide

in the dark of the soul
in the waste of the dawn
slowing if ever
walking away
you took my possessions
opened me up
like leaves in the rain
drooping ever so much
letting it slide
onto the ground

i know you see me
i know you feel me
so here we are
caught on the breach

 

[travu2]

popkidu2, I love your imagery and use of metaphors. My favorite lines are:

"..take this letter
from all that i hide

in the dark of the soul
in the waste of the dawn.."

 

[Alisaura]

Wow... cool...
I like what travu2 likes... Well I like it all, but those bits are my favourites too.

 

[The Wanderer]

in the dark of the soul
in the waste of the dawn
slowing if ever
walking away
you took my possessions
opened me up
like leaves in the rain
drooping ever so much
letting it slide
onto the ground

good stuff as always popkid! it creates a vivid picture in my mind