go on

[BabyGrace]

summers so close have slipped away
splashing down just as the drops of water fell back to earth
alone in a marshy graveyard you leave
without asking twice if you mattered to our hearts
the quiet hum of the dial tone
I pick up the phone and listen for a moment
before replacing it carefully and choking quietly
If I don't have the power to bridge the gaps of the living
then I never would have been able to save you
from the jaws of your watery death
so go quickly, and don't think of the empty phone
calls and cold ceremonies you leave behind for us.

 

[scatteroflight]

Originally posted by BabyGrace:

so go quickly, and don't think of the empty phone
calls and cold ceremonies you leave behind for us.

Yes, that's definitely one of the best poems I have read by you...



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Your sun so bright it leaves no shadows, only scars
Carved into stone on the face of earth
The moon is up and over One Tree Hill
We see the sun go down in your eyes

 

[ACROB@T]

Originally posted by BabyGrace:
summers so close have slipped away
splashing down just as the drops of water fell back to earth
alone in a marshy graveyard you leave
without asking twice if you mattered to our hearts
the quiet hum of the dial tone
I pick up the phone and listen for a moment
before replacing it carefully and choking quietly
If I don't have the power to bridge the gaps of the living
then I never would have been able to save you
from the jaws of your watery death
so go quickly, and don't think of the empty phone
calls and cold ceremonies you leave behind for us.

very haunting and beautiful Baby G..some years ago I could relate to this very strongly in places

 

[zooropamanda]

oh God that was torture Nik
Freaky too because I'm listening to a song called 'Life Will Go On'.
I love that opening line.
Beautiful..

 

[popsadie]

you paint a sad, tragic but almost beautiful picture here...."the quiet hum of the dialtone" "calls and cold ceremonies you leave behind for us"....powerful...

 

[LarryMullen's POPAngel]

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[The Wanderer]

If I don't have the power to bridge the gaps of the living
then I never would have been able to save you
from the jaws of your watery death

oh man that is so clever! I love that!

this feels like a mournful admonition by the narrator to self, to the that which has been told to "go on," and to the audience as a warning or a guilty confession... very painful, indeed

 

[BabyGrace]

thanks again guys

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You make yourself vulnerable to change in your life. But in the end, you've got to become the change you want to see in the world.
-the B-man