First Time Here....Be Nice - Page 6

EdgeVox · 03-08-2003, 02:46 AM

I didn't think you'd notice
When I strayed
My temporary kismet,
My false security
You know me better than that,
You know all my intentions,
I just want to negate your existance
I just wish you were never there
I just wish you were never my life
I can't, can I?
How naive could I possibly be
What a goddamned cliche I turned out to be
The bitter sunset brings zero comfort
The sky brags of independence
I wish I was a falling star
Content in my melancholy trajectory
It would be so easy to spend my life
Lamenting my downfall
I miss you my grace
My strength
Harbringer of God
Without you Heaven is an afterthought
I don't care
I don't care about karma
I don't care about Christ
If you're not there
It means nothing to me
It means nothing to me......

beegee · 03-08-2003, 10:05 AM

i just spent my morning reading seven pages of your poetry.

beautiful, beautiful work. your talent is incredible.

now...give us more.

EdgeVox · 03-08-2003, 07:11 PM

I'd give anything to see you smile
I'm not worth your trifles
You're my ocean
My soul's yours
I'd kill for you
My only love,
You make it so easy for me
You erase my scars
You are purity personified

EdgeVox · 03-08-2003, 07:21 PM

Wishing you were someone else
Stuck here by myself
Nothing but my blues and a deck of cards
Things could've been different
I could've made you happy
I'm sorry life is a sad lady
I'm sorry god is dead
I'm wishing you and I were away from all of this

I just want to be happy and I can't wait anymore
I can't give anymore
The rivers run dry,
The sun goes over your tears
I just want to be happy
I want some fucking grace
Gimme some truth some love
Don't tell me it's cliched
You've got some nerve making me love you
You've got some nerve

beegee · 03-08-2003, 07:38 PM

edgevox, your work is very powerful.

EdgeVox · 03-13-2003, 04:33 PM

bonosgirl84 you just made my day

beegee · 03-14-2003, 12:59 AM

i just went back and read some of it again. it's so passionate, so intense.

hold tight to this muse of yours. whoever it is inspires you to great work.

hiphop · 03-14-2003, 02:13 AM

"I like the sound of your waves crashing on my idealism"

Brilliant. EdgeVox, you kind of have a connection to my brain, if I may interprete this line personally.

EdgeVox · 03-20-2003, 09:52 AM

Your curt tongue undermines your silky lips,
Never knew it could get this good
Waiting, I no longer could
You're a devil in the summer time
Can't stop repenting when it's cold
You say you don't mind being blue
I'm prefer feeling grey
This is the happiest I've ever been
And it's without you
I wouldn't let it go
I couldn't let it go
I had to
The sound of the ocean echoes throughout my dreams
Feel like I'm drowning when I close my eyes
I don't mind it
I don't struggle
I'm at home in the anonymous waves
I slip beneath the foam
Only to come up for air just to spite the sky
I wish I was dead
Yet I've never felt so alive.....

beegee · 03-20-2003, 10:11 AM

"your curt tongue undermines your silky lips"

this is a damn good line. it's beautiful, absolutely beautiful...

EdgeVox · 03-20-2003, 10:57 AM

Sunny skies outside
You cut through them with your razorsharp hazel
Your denim smile
You're too bitter for my seas
My darling the tart
I can't find my footing when your around
Maybe it was never there
You make me feel drunk
Balance is overrated
You break my daylight
You sear my moon
You drown me in my own ocean
With your whisky kisses
And your smokey laugh
I love your corruption
And I know you love mine
I can't wait to fail for you...

beegee · 03-20-2003, 11:05 AM

"whisky kisses"

"smokey laugh"

"balance is overrated"

i love it, love it, love it...

EdgeVox · 03-20-2003, 11:21 AM

EdgeVox · 03-20-2003, 12:37 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by bonosgirl84
"whisky kisses"

"smokey laugh"

"balance is overrated"

i love it, love it, love it...

thanks a lot bonosgirl84,
I was going to PM you and thank you then but I'm not allowed
I pretty much write whenever I feel like it and I have been doing it for a while....but it's nice to see your comments......it always brings a big smile to my face.....just wanted to say thanks is all

beegee · 03-20-2003, 12:40 PM

jukebox tappin' whiskey sippin' bonosgirl lifts the brim of edgevox's drinkin' hat, glares at him with red-rimmed blues and says this...more poems or else

EdgeVox · 03-20-2003, 01:17 PM

Your kiss of smoke
Makes the bourbon taste even sweeter
Feeling pretty reckless tonight
Feeling like I shouldn't be here, with you
You make me feel like a sinner
I don't care anymore
I love it
I just want to waste my life with you
Everything in excess
Love, Lust, Drink, and Sorrow
Let's love and drink til we're in the ground
Where it doesn't hurt anymore
In a dream the devil came to me
We had some laughs
Said you were no good for me
I love you so much
I'm not afraid

beegee · 03-20-2003, 01:28 PM

"your kiss of smoke"

this line reminds me of a picture i saw of you in the drunk thread. i saw it in my mind right away...

"i love you so much...i'm not afraid"

this line is very brave. the recklessness of love, it's wonderful.

EdgeVox · 03-20-2003, 02:02 PM

do you have AIM?

beegee · 03-20-2003, 02:10 PM

bonosgirl drags deep on her marlboro red, exhales slowly, imagines herself crashing mary beth's '73 super beetle straight through the gates of hell, glares at the dealer who is showing a ten, orders another whiskey sour, doubles down on her fours anyway, and says this...no, i do not have AIM.

EdgeVox · 03-20-2003, 02:13 PM

wow

03-08-2003, 02:46 AM	#101
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 07:22 PM	I didn't think you'd notice When I strayed My temporary kismet, My false security You know me better than that, You know all my intentions, I just want to negate your existance I just wish you were never there I just wish you were never my life I can't, can I? How naive could I possibly be What a goddamned cliche I turned out to be The bitter sunset brings zero comfort The sky brags of independence I wish I was a falling star Content in my melancholy trajectory It would be so easy to spend my life Lamenting my downfall I miss you my grace My strength Harbringer of God Without you Heaven is an afterthought I don't care I don't care about karma I don't care about Christ If you're not there It means nothing to me It means nothing to me...... __________________

03-08-2003, 10:05 AM	#102
beegee Neon Zebra Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: southern nevada Posts: 10,615 Local Time: 05:22 PM	i just spent my morning reading seven pages of your poetry. beautiful, beautiful work. your talent is incredible. now...give us more. __________________

03-20-2003, 02:13 PM	#120
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 07:22 PM	wow __________________

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03-08-2003, 07:11 PM	#103
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 07:22 PM	I'd give anything to see you smile I'm not worth your trifles You're my ocean My soul's yours I'd kill for you My only love, You make it so easy for me You erase my scars You are purity personified

03-08-2003, 07:21 PM	#104
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 07:22 PM	Wishing you were someone else Stuck here by myself Nothing but my blues and a deck of cards Things could've been different I could've made you happy I'm sorry life is a sad lady I'm sorry god is dead I'm wishing you and I were away from all of this I just want to be happy and I can't wait anymore I can't give anymore The rivers run dry, The sun goes over your tears I just want to be happy I want some fucking grace Gimme some truth some love Don't tell me it's cliched You've got some nerve making me love you You've got some nerve

03-08-2003, 07:38 PM	#105
beegee Neon Zebra Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: southern nevada Posts: 10,615 Local Time: 05:22 PM	edgevox, your work is very powerful.

03-13-2003, 04:33 PM	#106
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 07:22 PM	bonosgirl84 you just made my day

03-14-2003, 12:59 AM	#107
beegee Neon Zebra Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: southern nevada Posts: 10,615 Local Time: 05:22 PM	i just went back and read some of it again. it's so passionate, so intense. hold tight to this muse of yours. whoever it is inspires you to great work.

03-14-2003, 02:13 AM	#108
hiphop Rock n' Roll Doggie ALL ACCESS Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: in the jungle Posts: 7,410 Local Time: 02:22 AM	"I like the sound of your waves crashing on my idealism" Brilliant. EdgeVox, you kind of have a connection to my brain, if I may interprete this line personally.

03-20-2003, 09:52 AM	#109
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 07:22 PM	Your curt tongue undermines your silky lips, Never knew it could get this good Waiting, I no longer could You're a devil in the summer time Can't stop repenting when it's cold You say you don't mind being blue I'm prefer feeling grey This is the happiest I've ever been And it's without you I wouldn't let it go I couldn't let it go I had to The sound of the ocean echoes throughout my dreams Feel like I'm drowning when I close my eyes I don't mind it I don't struggle I'm at home in the anonymous waves I slip beneath the foam Only to come up for air just to spite the sky I wish I was dead Yet I've never felt so alive.....

03-20-2003, 10:11 AM	#110
beegee Neon Zebra Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: southern nevada Posts: 10,615 Local Time: 05:22 PM	"your curt tongue undermines your silky lips" this is a damn good line. it's beautiful, absolutely beautiful...

03-20-2003, 10:57 AM	#111
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 07:22 PM	Sunny skies outside You cut through them with your razorsharp hazel Your denim smile You're too bitter for my seas My darling the tart I can't find my footing when your around Maybe it was never there You make me feel drunk Balance is overrated You break my daylight You sear my moon You drown me in my own ocean With your whisky kisses And your smokey laugh I love your corruption And I know you love mine I can't wait to fail for you...

03-20-2003, 11:05 AM	#112
beegee Neon Zebra Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: southern nevada Posts: 10,615 Local Time: 05:22 PM	"whisky kisses" "smokey laugh" "balance is overrated" i love it, love it, love it...

03-20-2003, 11:21 AM	#113
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 07:22 PM

03-20-2003, 12:40 PM	#115
beegee Neon Zebra Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: southern nevada Posts: 10,615 Local Time: 05:22 PM	jukebox tappin' whiskey sippin' bonosgirl lifts the brim of edgevox's drinkin' hat, glares at him with red-rimmed blues and says this...more poems or else

03-20-2003, 01:17 PM	#116
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 07:22 PM	Your kiss of smoke Makes the bourbon taste even sweeter Feeling pretty reckless tonight Feeling like I shouldn't be here, with you You make me feel like a sinner I don't care anymore I love it I just want to waste my life with you Everything in excess Love, Lust, Drink, and Sorrow Let's love and drink til we're in the ground Where it doesn't hurt anymore In a dream the devil came to me We had some laughs Said you were no good for me I love you so much I'm not afraid

03-20-2003, 01:28 PM	#117
beegee Neon Zebra Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: southern nevada Posts: 10,615 Local Time: 05:22 PM	"your kiss of smoke" this line reminds me of a picture i saw of you in the drunk thread. i saw it in my mind right away... "i love you so much...i'm not afraid" this line is very brave. the recklessness of love, it's wonderful.

03-20-2003, 02:02 PM	#118
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 07:22 PM	do you have AIM?

03-20-2003, 02:10 PM	#119
beegee Neon Zebra Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: southern nevada Posts: 10,615 Local Time: 05:22 PM	bonosgirl drags deep on her marlboro red, exhales slowly, imagines herself crashing mary beth's '73 super beetle straight through the gates of hell, glares at the dealer who is showing a ten, orders another whiskey sour, doubles down on her fours anyway, and says this...no, i do not have AIM.