First Time Here....Be Nice - Page 12

macphisto777 · 10-22-2004, 03:35 AM

Reading these poetic verses, they are so Honest and Real they remind me of the lyrical depth and beauty of the Achtung Baby record. This is poetry so powerful and emotional it often moves me in the way that a song can. I don't believe I have ever experienced that before. To be slammed in the chest with just a simple reading of poetry...

macphisto777 · 10-22-2004, 03:46 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by EdgeVox
Tuesday July 27, 2004 3:30 am

Somebody asked me if I knew what I was in my past life,
I answered, "A cowboy or a poet"
I didn't realize how ridiculous that sounded til later that night
Ridiculous in the sense that both represent romantic illusions that involve wandering and philosophy
I long for a sense of purpose
I feel like I'm just killing time
Til I feel something real
It's 3 am on 25th and 3rd Avenue
The Clash are on the radio
And once again I'm lost
Low lit room with smokes and rosary beads
I don't remember how to pray
I don't remember how to love
I can be witty and hold my liquor
I can drink whiskey til dawn
And love a woman til the stars burn
I cling to drinking, fucking, because the thought of being alone with my demons and doubts terrifies me
I'm too tired to walk in tot the sea
but I'd run into towers of fire
Lost my bearings when you left me
And once again I'm lost......

If you are not channeling Bono's ghost, I don't know what to believe. Is this a poem or journal entry(not sure which this is...you tell me). Hmmm.

EdgeVox · 10-25-2004, 01:31 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by macphisto777

If you are not channeling Bono's ghost, I don't know what to believe. Is this a poem or journal entry(not sure which this is...you tell me). Hmmm.

I wrote that while I was in NYC for a month......didn't have a computer so I just jotted stuff in a notebook..

EdgeVox · 10-28-2004, 09:02 AM

Boots strapped tight
Backpack, 3 shirts and cigarettes
Zippo and a compass
I'm fucking out of here..

EdgeVox · 11-15-2004, 07:09 AM

Electricity fills the room
The rain's kicking in
I can hear you smother your smoke in glass
It's dark again and we're still strangers

Sweet angst
Beautiful silence
Fumbling towards something familiar
Even though you're just a beautiful stranger now
Time's made us ghosts

I smile knowingly at the unflinching dead-end of your heart
I laugh nervously at the fact that the same lips I found solace in
Now offer mediocre pleasantries just to pass the time
Is there really all there is to you?
Or was it my illusion to lose?
I hate to dwell but I'm wired and feeling particularly introspective
I'm pretty sure I'm self-obsessed because I'm having a good time smoking in the rain
I'm pretty sure I'm waiting for God to wake me up with pain

Communion is dead
Your altar's are stained
I'm daring you to acknowledge me
I'm trying so fucking hard to provoke you
I'm drowning in my apathatic swells
Good Christ I need to grow the fuck up
Either that or kill myself
Maybe I'll just run..

EdgeVox · 12-15-2004, 09:50 AM

The skies part like reflections of a grey ocean
Sun's on sabbatical
This is the way I like it
It's so cold our noses are red
Either that or we've had too much wine
Haven't been this happy in a while
George Harrison is booming from the stereo
And you've been playing in my head all day
It's always nice to hear you laugh
Even when you don't really mean it
God, I don't know where I'd be without you
You're wearing a silly pinstriped coat
I guess you're just playing "grown-up"
I'm just looking at you
Wondering if this'll last
I guess I'm just playing "cliche"
I love you, but you already know that
So I'll just be quiet and listen to the cold breeze
Seems it always has something to say...

EdgeVox · 01-03-2005, 03:44 PM

The vulgarities of your eyes deceive your otherworldly demurity,
She walked as if being carried by angels over broken glass,
She never could smile like she meant it, more like she just wanted to have something to say,
It's been 5 years and the hurt she gave to me is the most sincere and concrete reality I've ever embraced,
It's as if her parting gift left me with an ambition for despair,
I love feeling this way
The ages take their toll on our faces like the cracks made on a crystal ball being thrown against the same brick wal over and over again,l
I consume impurities to numb myself from the unflinching cold stare of God demonstrating his love with abject cruelty,
I love feeling this way...

EdgeVox · 01-24-2005, 04:34 PM

My ears are ringing
I feel as if I can hear the streetlights in the distance
We've been down this road too many times before
You sound as if you're whispering because you know I don't want to hear it
Everytime you say something that burns I reach for the dial to drown you out
We're driving each other fucking crazy
I choose not to hear you
I choose not to love you
I don't fucking care if you cease to exist
Can't we take this up tomorrow?
Oh shit now you're really upset
You're cursing like a sailor and it's adorable
We both went too far
Clean slate for tomorrow?
I know, I know...
Yeah yeah alright
We both went too far...

EdgeVox · 02-02-2005, 04:01 PM

Chill in the air
Smoke in my eyes
Lump in my throat
Anger in my heart
And you, you're fucking glowing
How can you just sit there looking lovely
When everything else is looking a whiter shade of decay
I didn't think then
The word stupor doesn't even begin to describe it
I'm wide awake now
I feel as if I've just awoken from a self-imposed coma
Only to find out it's the end of the world
That's funny
I have no problem laughing at all this
All this fucking confusion
Still I'm feeling pretty good
And you
How can you sit there looking so lovely
Wake up
Wake up
Fucking wake up

EdgeVox · 03-09-2005, 11:51 PM

Memories are a bitch
Lost loves are a shrug
And your eyes are stillborn
Your bravados no good here
Seethe now sister
This deserts of our making
Sun in your face
And saltwater blood
Love, you're dusk isn't shy
You're high on your blues
With your revolution shoes
Yeah, you paid for those too
Let's tear it down now
Take the spear from your side
You don't have to cry anymore
The clouds boiling over
God's winking an eye
The storms just starting
But we've been drowning all our lives
You're the eye of the storm
I should've known all along
That you're taking me with you tonight...

ZeroDude · 03-10-2005, 06:00 AM

Oh my, someone is prolific and great at that, well great at times, love some of the stuff after trawling through this, but in the last piece "revolution shoes" is a bit of forced rhyming imo but you redeemed your self amazingly with the rest of the piece, I'm in awe of all this

beegee · 03-10-2005, 10:47 PM

it didn't feel like forced rhyming at all. i thought that part flowed perfectly.

nice work, as usual.

and it's good to see you back.

EdgeVox · 03-23-2005, 05:42 AM

Me dan ganas te llorarte mis vidrios
De gritarte mis deseos
De reirme de mis problemas
Me pienso matar muy pronto
Ya no aguanto mis tormentas
Me muero de sueno
Me muero de ahogarme en tus ojos
Estoy lastimado hasta en el alma
yo no me merezco sentirme asi
Cuando se queme el cielo
Procura buscarte un idiota
Que te crea tus mentiras
Tu vidrio quebrado
Refleja tus caras
Nina perdida me has danado
Por la ultima vez...

ZeroDude · 03-23-2005, 05:52 AM

Now I wish I spoke Spanish, sorry I'm too ignorant to be bothered to learn it, but I'm sure it's a great piece just like all of your others and I would tryto be constructive and give criticism to all of your work but your an extremely talented writer so I'd doubt my input would be of much use, thanks for all of your work posted here and haven't been here long in comparision but the place is in good nick believe me

EdgeVox · 03-23-2005, 05:56 AM

Thanks, I've made it a point to try and read more in DOL and I briefly looked over your thread........pretty cool pretty cool. Thanks again for the comments.

Xavier

ZeroDude · 03-23-2005, 05:58 AM

No problem I love writing, reading and language in general, cheers

For Honor · 03-23-2005, 06:17 PM

Wow, I don't know how I missed all of this here. You've got some great stuff, EdgeVox.

EdgeVox · 04-06-2005, 03:19 PM

April 1, 2005 4:30 am

Indecision sparked by low level lust
Time consuming mediocrity
Blue collar masturbation
The fire's consuming itself
Let down your hair
Raise up your glasses
Cheers to the carousel of monotony
I wish you were there to see it
You'd make the transition so much easier
Let me by you a drink,
It's the least I can do
Now that we're strangers and all
It's not a bad way to fill in the dead moments between us...

EdgeVox · 04-06-2005, 03:24 PM

Midnight comes and I'm drunk again
Seems that the sun sets faster when you're around
Days get shorter and I'm left longing
I don't need another round
I don't need another round
What the hell
Raise our glasses and toast the night
She's always been kind to us
I'm fucking invincible with you by my side
Don't worry honey we'll keep it light
I don't need to tell you it's you
You're the one that keeps me sane
You're the one that I'd be normal for
You're the one that tears me down
It's you...

beegee · 04-06-2005, 11:09 PM

the one written on april first is one of your best, imo.

Let down your hair
Raise up your glasses
Cheers to the carousel of monotony

these lines here are incredible.

they give two completely different images if you let them. bravo.

10-22-2004, 03:35 AM	#221
macphisto777 The Fly Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: atlanta...soon to be L.A. Posts: 181 Local Time: 12:10 PM	Reading these poetic verses, they are so Honest and Real they remind me of the lyrical depth and beauty of the Achtung Baby record. This is poetry so powerful and emotional it often moves me in the way that a song can. I don't believe I have ever experienced that before. To be slammed in the chest with just a simple reading of poetry... __________________

04-06-2005, 11:09 PM	#240
beegee Neon Zebra Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: southern nevada Posts: 10,616 Local Time: 09:10 AM	the one written on april first is one of your best, imo. Let down your hair Raise up your glasses Cheers to the carousel of monotony these lines here are incredible. they give two completely different images if you let them. bravo. __________________

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10-28-2004, 09:02 AM	#224
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 12:10 PM	Boots strapped tight Backpack, 3 shirts and cigarettes Zippo and a compass I'm fucking out of here..

11-15-2004, 07:09 AM	#225
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 12:10 PM	Electricity fills the room The rain's kicking in I can hear you smother your smoke in glass It's dark again and we're still strangers Sweet angst Beautiful silence Fumbling towards something familiar Even though you're just a beautiful stranger now Time's made us ghosts I smile knowingly at the unflinching dead-end of your heart I laugh nervously at the fact that the same lips I found solace in Now offer mediocre pleasantries just to pass the time Is there really all there is to you? Or was it my illusion to lose? I hate to dwell but I'm wired and feeling particularly introspective I'm pretty sure I'm self-obsessed because I'm having a good time smoking in the rain I'm pretty sure I'm waiting for God to wake me up with pain Communion is dead Your altar's are stained I'm daring you to acknowledge me I'm trying so fucking hard to provoke you I'm drowning in my apathatic swells Good Christ I need to grow the fuck up Either that or kill myself Maybe I'll just run..

12-15-2004, 09:50 AM	#226
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 12:10 PM	The skies part like reflections of a grey ocean Sun's on sabbatical This is the way I like it It's so cold our noses are red Either that or we've had too much wine Haven't been this happy in a while George Harrison is booming from the stereo And you've been playing in my head all day It's always nice to hear you laugh Even when you don't really mean it God, I don't know where I'd be without you You're wearing a silly pinstriped coat I guess you're just playing "grown-up" I'm just looking at you Wondering if this'll last I guess I'm just playing "cliche" I love you, but you already know that So I'll just be quiet and listen to the cold breeze Seems it always has something to say...

01-03-2005, 03:44 PM	#227
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 12:10 PM	The vulgarities of your eyes deceive your otherworldly demurity, She walked as if being carried by angels over broken glass, She never could smile like she meant it, more like she just wanted to have something to say, It's been 5 years and the hurt she gave to me is the most sincere and concrete reality I've ever embraced, It's as if her parting gift left me with an ambition for despair, I love feeling this way The ages take their toll on our faces like the cracks made on a crystal ball being thrown against the same brick wal over and over again,l I consume impurities to numb myself from the unflinching cold stare of God demonstrating his love with abject cruelty, I love feeling this way...

01-24-2005, 04:34 PM	#228
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 12:10 PM	My ears are ringing I feel as if I can hear the streetlights in the distance We've been down this road too many times before You sound as if you're whispering because you know I don't want to hear it Everytime you say something that burns I reach for the dial to drown you out We're driving each other fucking crazy I choose not to hear you I choose not to love you I don't fucking care if you cease to exist Can't we take this up tomorrow? Oh shit now you're really upset You're cursing like a sailor and it's adorable We both went too far Clean slate for tomorrow? I know, I know... Yeah yeah alright We both went too far...

02-02-2005, 04:01 PM	#229
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 12:10 PM	Chill in the air Smoke in my eyes Lump in my throat Anger in my heart And you, you're fucking glowing How can you just sit there looking lovely When everything else is looking a whiter shade of decay I didn't think then The word stupor doesn't even begin to describe it I'm wide awake now I feel as if I've just awoken from a self-imposed coma Only to find out it's the end of the world That's funny I have no problem laughing at all this All this fucking confusion Still I'm feeling pretty good And you How can you sit there looking so lovely Wake up Wake up Fucking wake up

03-09-2005, 11:51 PM	#230
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 12:10 PM	Memories are a bitch Lost loves are a shrug And your eyes are stillborn Your bravados no good here Seethe now sister This deserts of our making Sun in your face And saltwater blood Love, you're dusk isn't shy You're high on your blues With your revolution shoes Yeah, you paid for those too Let's tear it down now Take the spear from your side You don't have to cry anymore The clouds boiling over God's winking an eye The storms just starting But we've been drowning all our lives You're the eye of the storm I should've known all along That you're taking me with you tonight...

03-10-2005, 06:00 AM	#231
ZeroDude Rock n' Roll Doggie Band-aid Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Belfast Posts: 4,953 Local Time: 06:10 PM	Oh my, someone is prolific and great at that, well great at times, love some of the stuff after trawling through this, but in the last piece "revolution shoes" is a bit of forced rhyming imo but you redeemed your self amazingly with the rest of the piece, I'm in awe of all this

03-10-2005, 10:47 PM	#232
beegee Neon Zebra Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: southern nevada Posts: 10,616 Local Time: 09:10 AM	it didn't feel like forced rhyming at all. i thought that part flowed perfectly. nice work, as usual. and it's good to see you back.

03-23-2005, 05:42 AM	#233
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 12:10 PM	Me dan ganas te llorarte mis vidrios De gritarte mis deseos De reirme de mis problemas Me pienso matar muy pronto Ya no aguanto mis tormentas Me muero de sueno Me muero de ahogarme en tus ojos Estoy lastimado hasta en el alma yo no me merezco sentirme asi Cuando se queme el cielo Procura buscarte un idiota Que te crea tus mentiras Tu vidrio quebrado Refleja tus caras Nina perdida me has danado Por la ultima vez...

03-23-2005, 05:52 AM	#234
ZeroDude Rock n' Roll Doggie Band-aid Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Belfast Posts: 4,953 Local Time: 06:10 PM	Now I wish I spoke Spanish, sorry I'm too ignorant to be bothered to learn it, but I'm sure it's a great piece just like all of your others and I would tryto be constructive and give criticism to all of your work but your an extremely talented writer so I'd doubt my input would be of much use, thanks for all of your work posted here and haven't been here long in comparision but the place is in good nick believe me

03-23-2005, 05:56 AM	#235
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 12:10 PM	Thanks, I've made it a point to try and read more in DOL and I briefly looked over your thread........pretty cool pretty cool. Thanks again for the comments. Xavier

03-23-2005, 05:58 AM	#236
ZeroDude Rock n' Roll Doggie Band-aid Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Belfast Posts: 4,953 Local Time: 06:10 PM	No problem I love writing, reading and language in general, cheers

03-23-2005, 06:17 PM	#237
For Honor Rock n' Roll Doggie VIP PASS Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: East Coast, USA Posts: 5,278 Local Time: 12:10 PM	Wow, I don't know how I missed all of this here. You've got some great stuff, EdgeVox.

04-06-2005, 03:19 PM	#238
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 12:10 PM	April 1, 2005 4:30 am Indecision sparked by low level lust Time consuming mediocrity Blue collar masturbation The fire's consuming itself Let down your hair Raise up your glasses Cheers to the carousel of monotony I wish you were there to see it You'd make the transition so much easier Let me by you a drink, It's the least I can do Now that we're strangers and all It's not a bad way to fill in the dead moments between us...

04-06-2005, 03:24 PM	#239
EdgeVox War Child Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Texas/Mexico Posts: 903 Local Time: 12:10 PM	Midnight comes and I'm drunk again Seems that the sun sets faster when you're around Days get shorter and I'm left longing I don't need another round I don't need another round What the hell Raise our glasses and toast the night She's always been kind to us I'm fucking invincible with you by my side Don't worry honey we'll keep it light I don't need to tell you it's you You're the one that keeps me sane You're the one that I'd be normal for You're the one that tears me down It's you...