exit from the past - U2 Feedback

Go Back   U2 Feedback > United Colours > Dream Out Loud (and in Colour!)
Click Here to Login
Reply
 
Thread Tools Search this Thread Display Modes
 
Old 10-26-2005, 09:18 PM   #1
Blue Crack Addict
 
the tourist's Avatar
 
Join Date: Dec 2003
Posts: 27,919
Local Time: 02:34 AM
exit from the past

the shimmering halo of midnight aurora cascades
electric blue over the brown mountains behind the growing forest of green tangles, roots digging deep.
gold miners searching for one final hope under that midnight sky
and there we were, sitting back to back
on the grass stained napsack, talking about the stars,
arms interlocked, hair
upon my shoulder.
and the moon watched on high overhead through the boiling atmosphere, ever unclear
like eyes awaking under the pressure of chlorinated water.
hyphenated words and awkward verbs left unspoken, left unbroken,
bereft and devoid of warmth
those weary travelers along the paths unknown of blazed trail home on through the forest and mountains that made the ground beneath their feet.
who they were, they weren't sure;
where they were going no one knows.
and as their time of rest came to a close and the boy stood from the grass which grows,
giving his hand to the girl with the beautiful smile, to help her off her feet
and walk those endless miles
into the future.
__________________

the tourist is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-27-2005, 12:24 AM   #2
Rock n' Roll Doggie
VIP PASS
 
For Honor's Avatar
 
Join Date: Dec 2004
Location: East Coast, USA
Posts: 5,278
Local Time: 04:34 AM
Wow, that is a cool mixture of time there...... I like it a lot.

__________________

For Honor is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-27-2005, 10:04 AM   #3
Refugee
 
wizard2c's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2005
Location: Florida
Posts: 1,580
Local Time: 09:34 AM
Very nice writing. I like the mixture of them and you.

carol
wizard2c
wizard2c is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-28-2005, 06:48 PM   #4
Blue Crack Supplier
 
lazarus's Avatar
 
Join Date: Nov 2004
Location: Los Angeles, California
Posts: 42,037
Local Time: 01:34 AM
great use of the word "aurora". You don't see that one too often.

"and the moon watched on high overhead through the boiling atmosphere, ever unclear
like eyes awaking under the pressure of chlorinated water."

that's really good.
lazarus is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply

Thread Tools Search this Thread
Search this Thread:

Advanced Search
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are Off
Pingbacks are Off
Refbacks are Off



All times are GMT -5. The time now is 04:34 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.8 Beta 1
Copyright ©2000 - 2023, vBulletin Solutions, Inc.
Design, images and all things inclusive copyright © Interference.com
×