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Rock n' Roll Doggie
Join Date: Oct 2004
Location: Cork, Ireland... IM BACK!
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Enclosed in these Barriers
Enclosed in my mind is where your beauty lies
__________________putting the day in my night and the stars in my skies but when your with me that all changes for the best every word is priceless, my hearts the test but the one i want can never be exposed i cant see the smile because you stay enclosed i want you to overcome these barriers of mine break through who cares what they think its not their life its yours and its mine but together we lay dreaming of "what if" from night right through the day maybe its just me caught up in my hopes do you know i feel, actually nobody knows but inside its real inside its strong cant be described in any poem letter or song but your beauty isnt enclosed behind these barriers inside wiether i matter to you, youll always shine if you dont shine for me then do it for yourself your owed that much, for putting up with what u were dealt i played a part if only a small one back then it wasnt this strong just a bit of fun but since the day that it might of been that i should of done in then, i should of seen the true beauty thats enclosed not just in my mind but that breaks down the barriers and flys away to shine |
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Rock n' Roll Doggie
VIP PASS Join Date: Dec 2004
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This is another one of those rare poems that I sort of don't like because it reminds me too much of a situation I'm experiencing myself.....
__________________*sigh* Good job |
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Join Date: Apr 2005
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That was beautiful! Good job
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Join Date: Aug 2003
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wow, I wish I could write stuff like that
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Rock n' Roll Doggie
Band-aid Join Date: Sep 2004
Location: Belfast
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Good work, probably the best you've done
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Rock n' Roll Doggie
Join Date: Oct 2004
Location: Cork, Ireland... IM BACK!
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cheers guys
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Join Date: Feb 2005
Location: Florida
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Excelllent writing.
__________________Wish I could write more about love.....but wizards live a strange sort of existence...it's not that we don't love it's just the worldliness that interferences with it all. carol wizard2c ![]() |
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