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Old 09-30-2002, 05:49 AM   #1
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darkness/daylight

There is a calm just before dawn
silent darkness blankets the ground
a random street lamp gives trees murky shadows
this is the world when it sleeps

The sun starts to peek around
painting the clouds orange and red
turning frost into dew
turning dew into mist

The painted clouds fade to white
as the sun makes it's journey
the trees have now taken the orange and red
from the clouds, before they too fade to the ground

The street lamps dim
as the sun gives trees sharper shadows
taking the cool blanket off the grass
This is the world when it is waking up
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Old 09-30-2002, 06:05 AM   #2
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Nice prose. The sky's more interesting than tv; you never see the same sky twice.

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Old 09-30-2002, 07:11 AM   #3
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Beautiful, Daisybean! I felt like I was floating around in the sky watching all this. And it made me want to eat pumpkin pie and rake leaves! autumn!
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Old 09-30-2002, 07:11 AM   #4
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Old 10-01-2002, 10:28 PM   #5
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It is odd how we write about different things. People, events, emotions, etc. This just made me picture a scenery in my head. thanks


I love the dawn and twilight.
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Old 10-03-2002, 09:45 AM   #6
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it is very clean and still when the world is waking up. and pretty just like your poem
I like it!
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Old 10-05-2002, 01:09 AM   #7
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the trees have now taken the orange and red
from the clouds, before they too fade to the ground


oh, that is such a great transition, beautiful imagery
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Old 10-08-2002, 07:36 AM   #8
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Hey that's really good
Keep writing, u have a gift
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Old 10-10-2002, 06:10 AM   #9
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Thank you for all your kind words, that was very sweet.

It's weird, it almost feels undeserved, because I just sat here and wrote it in the space of ten minutes...it wasn't like a slaved over it for months, editing and rewriting.
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Old 10-11-2002, 07:39 AM   #10
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Fall is my fave! thanks for the poem! ME Likey!!

I bet you'd do a great one about winter!
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