travu2
The Fly
[This message has been edited by travu2 (edited 03-07-2001).]
asleep in their park
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[This message has been edited by travu2 (edited 03-07-2001).]
The Wanderer
Kid A
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foray
Rock n' Roll Doggie
haha, travu2
foray
foray
travu2
The Fly
Well, there WAS a poem there, but I got embarassed.. what can I say.
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"A highway warm.. sings silent poetry." Smashing Pumpkins
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"A highway warm.. sings silent poetry." Smashing Pumpkins
DancingBarefoot
The Fly
Don't be shy!
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**Still looking for the
face I had before the
world was made....**
**Work like you don't
need money, love like
you've never been hurt,
and dance like no
one's watching.**
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**Still looking for the
face I had before the
world was made....**
**Work like you don't
need money, love like
you've never been hurt,
and dance like no
one's watching.**
travu2
The Fly
ok, fine. I wrote this about 5 years ago.
I sleep in their park where you saw me off,
the dim atom on this moonlit mountainside
that we only knew through a bird telescope.
Dawn's probing lens will never unearth me.
They defy gravity in the caverns above me
and let me drift between their empty homes:
cactus gardens, heavy curtains, and then
I imagine you're here, at the end of a road.
I spent last night deep inside my closet,
fending off black widows, trying to fix
my old walkey talkey, to reach someone,
to channel that boy from his room in the valley.
Please be kind. And if you hate it, then either don't say so, or lie to me!
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"..and my tongue to tell you the sweetest lies.."
I sleep in their park where you saw me off,
the dim atom on this moonlit mountainside
that we only knew through a bird telescope.
Dawn's probing lens will never unearth me.
They defy gravity in the caverns above me
and let me drift between their empty homes:
cactus gardens, heavy curtains, and then
I imagine you're here, at the end of a road.
I spent last night deep inside my closet,
fending off black widows, trying to fix
my old walkey talkey, to reach someone,
to channel that boy from his room in the valley.
Please be kind. And if you hate it, then either don't say so, or lie to me!
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"..and my tongue to tell you the sweetest lies.."
silver_afterglow
Babyface
"I spent last night deep inside my closet,
fending off black widows, trying to fix
my old walkey talkey, to reach someone,
to channel that boy from his room in the valley."
I love that part so much. To me it brings back some semblance of childhood. Don't know if it was intended to do this, but all the same it does. It reminds me of the times when all I cared about was being able to stay out late at night with my friends, hoping that my parents wouldn't call me in before all of the other kids were called in. It reminds me of returning to that feeling. Thank you for sharing!!
fending off black widows, trying to fix
my old walkey talkey, to reach someone,
to channel that boy from his room in the valley."
I love that part so much. To me it brings back some semblance of childhood. Don't know if it was intended to do this, but all the same it does. It reminds me of the times when all I cared about was being able to stay out late at night with my friends, hoping that my parents wouldn't call me in before all of the other kids were called in. It reminds me of returning to that feeling. Thank you for sharing!!
scatteroflight
Refugee
I'm feeling sad right now, for a few reasons, feeling sad and nostalgic, which is kind of strange considering I'm only 21, and this poem heightens the feeling. It hurts, but some of it is quite beautiful.
Got to get back to writing more poetry. And I believe this is my 100th post. If I can, I'm going to stop reading this forum soon, until I see U2 in mid April, just so I don't read all the spoilers and so I don't get over-U2d.
Got to get back to writing more poetry. And I believe this is my 100th post. If I can, I'm going to stop reading this forum soon, until I see U2 in mid April, just so I don't read all the spoilers and so I don't get over-U2d.
DancingBarefoot
The Fly
I think this poem is very good. I'm glad you decided to share it. (It wasn't so bad was it?
) I hope you continue to share poetry with us.
BTW, scatteroflight - Happy 100th!!
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**Still looking for the
face I had before the
world was made....**
**Work like you don't
need money, love like
you've never been hurt,
and dance like no
one's watching.**
BTW, scatteroflight - Happy 100th!!
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**Still looking for the
face I had before the
world was made....**
**Work like you don't
need money, love like
you've never been hurt,
and dance like no
one's watching.**
BabyGrace
Refugee
please people don't ever be afraid to post here
I love reading everyone's stuff...it's all so...human
travu2, that was a gorgeous piece; I'm not just saying that
no need for embarassment
happy 100, scattero...oh and I think I'm starting to finally (after 10 mos) suffer from over-u2dom
I won't leave tho hahahaha
addiction is a very, very evil thing
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Just the bang and the clatter
As an angel runs to ground...
I love reading everyone's stuff...it's all so...human
travu2, that was a gorgeous piece; I'm not just saying that
no need for embarassment
happy 100, scattero...oh and I think I'm starting to finally (after 10 mos) suffer from over-u2dom
I won't leave tho hahahaha
addiction is a very, very evil thing
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Just the bang and the clatter
As an angel runs to ground...
travu2
The Fly
Thanks you guys.
It does feel good to share your feelings in a forum this way, but I can be a little too sensitive sometimes I guess. I don't think I'll get brave enough to post again for a while though!
The Wanderer
Kid A
I still don't know why you deleted it in the first place?
I like this one travu2
the dim atom on this moonlit mountainside
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fending off black widows
I like this one travu2
the dim atom on this moonlit mountainside
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fending off black widows
bicyclingfish
The Fly
"I spent last night deep inside my closet,
fending off black widows, trying to fix
my old walkey talkey, to reach someone,
to channel that boy from his room in the valley."
travu2, this is spectacular. The flow of the words, the imagery... take us there again. Gimme some more to read.
If you wrote this five years ago, imagine what you could write now. And we're only a bunch of computer people- no one you have to answer to everyday.
Try out more stuff here.
fending off black widows, trying to fix
my old walkey talkey, to reach someone,
to channel that boy from his room in the valley."
travu2, this is spectacular. The flow of the words, the imagery... take us there again. Gimme some more to read.
If you wrote this five years ago, imagine what you could write now. And we're only a bunch of computer people- no one you have to answer to everyday.
Try out more stuff here.
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