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Old 07-04-2001, 06:40 PM   #1
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"a story of Time Gone (wrong)"

in the days she'd sit
weaving, creating, tying together
loving, a shelter above the fury
she'd hold out her hands
and create order

he was meant to dream
he toiled, he built, he soared
they grew
and as the night came
he'd go home to her arms

seasons flew
the sky bronzed
the geese scattered
and their feathers fell back to earth
a lilting reminder of what was

the stones rose around their memory
and the childrens' laughter faded
subdued by the creeping coldness

white walls enclosed their future
bubbling oxygen
plastic tubes, vials
a mixture of God
drowned in chemicals
slowly the warmth of the night was lost
a secure embrace, a soul whisper
spun out to the galaxies

she awoke with a shiver
he was gone
they were one, but alone

the first light, pale and weak
as dishwater illuminated
the dying embers
rubbing sleep from her eyes
and shaking mud
from her combat-weary boots
stumbling to her feet
and trudging on

she trips once
cursing and glancing back
she notices a fallen Cornerstone

Time was gone
and for a moment
she knew where it went wrong

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Old 07-05-2001, 04:11 PM   #2
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[QUOTE]Originally posted by BabyGrace:

she awoke with a shiver
he was gone
they were one, but alone


I enjoyed your poem especially this quote. The entire piece made me think of some events going on in my life right now.



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Old 07-06-2001, 03:36 AM   #3
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Wow, you jsut get better and better girl!

I noticed soem lines that really struck me but when I went bcak to find them I couldnt decide cause the whole thing was really well written.
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