A Genial Letter

ZeroDude · 09-30-2005, 01:16 PM

Hello everyone, if this is lacking in quality it's due to me just typing it in as it came to me, no plan no nothing, I just needed to post..............................

A genial letter,
The "S" from the tongue,
With lips slowly parting,
Brutality at one,
With love claiming sorrow,
Life taking death,
To a depression,
Condoning socialist theft,

As television sells us,
Fluoride dreams,
That whitest of whites,
The united themes,
To gain, to prosper,
To lay down your guns,
As a young man lies dead,
The air fucked from his lungs,

She stands in the shadows,
As long as the shadows stand her,
Working the brothel,
Yet longing to care,
But he wasn't gentle,
He was hunting for blood,
The dogs they were raging,
As she did all that she could,
But that's all too vague,
She died as she slept,
An STD victim with noone exempt,
From chasing a lie,
Watching T.V.
Waiting to buy into,
Our fluoride dreams........................

Afterwards I cried for inoccence in a cynical world, I wanted justice but they gave me blood,

All I've got is a red guitar three chords and the truth, The rest is up to you,

But who are you?

wizard2c · 09-30-2005, 10:02 PM

Glad to hear from you Zero Dude.....good writing as usual...I'll try to comment on it tomorrow.....I'm trying to battle off an on-coming headache before it becomes full-blown. My body feels battle weary as well. I need to write something myself....but time passes quickly.

carol
wizard2c

ZeroDude · 10-01-2005, 07:02 PM

Thanks Carol

For Honor · 10-02-2005, 01:14 AM

Always good to see you writing again, friend

For Honor · 10-02-2005, 01:15 AM

Quote:

She stands in the shadows,
As long as the shadows stand her,

^ myfavorite lines

ZeroDude · 10-02-2005, 08:48 AM

Thanks Jesse (FH), I'm glad I'm writing again aswell and those lines are my favorites too, I love playing on words like that, it keeps me thinking anyway

lazarus · 10-03-2005, 04:50 AM

"the air fucked from his lungs" is harsh, but something I've not heard before, and powerful.

I also like the way you misdirected with the term "a genial letter", which instead of a page of writing turned out to be just an "S". A nice trick.

09-30-2005, 01:16 PM	#1
ZeroDude Rock n' Roll Doggie Band-aid Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Belfast Posts: 4,953 Local Time: 12:16 PM	A Genial Letter Hello everyone, if this is lacking in quality it's due to me just typing it in as it came to me, no plan no nothing, I just needed to post.............................. A genial letter, The "S" from the tongue, With lips slowly parting, Brutality at one, With love claiming sorrow, Life taking death, To a depression, Condoning socialist theft, As television sells us, Fluoride dreams, That whitest of whites, The united themes, To gain, to prosper, To lay down your guns, As a young man lies dead, The air fucked from his lungs, She stands in the shadows, As long as the shadows stand her, Working the brothel, Yet longing to care, But he wasn't gentle, He was hunting for blood, The dogs they were raging, As she did all that she could, But that's all too vague, She died as she slept, An STD victim with noone exempt, From chasing a lie, Watching T.V. Waiting to buy into, Our fluoride dreams........................ Afterwards I cried for inoccence in a cynical world, I wanted justice but they gave me blood, All I've got is a red guitar three chords and the truth, The rest is up to you, But who are you? __________________

09-30-2005, 10:02 PM	#2
wizard2c Refugee Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Florida Posts: 1,580 Local Time: 11:16 AM	reply Glad to hear from you Zero Dude.....good writing as usual...I'll try to comment on it tomorrow.....I'm trying to battle off an on-coming headache before it becomes full-blown. My body feels battle weary as well. I need to write something myself....but time passes quickly. carol wizard2c __________________

10-03-2005, 04:50 AM	#7
lazarus Blue Crack Supplier Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Los Angeles, California Posts: 42,037 Local Time: 03:16 AM	"the air fucked from his lungs" is harsh, but something I've not heard before, and powerful. I also like the way you misdirected with the term "a genial letter", which instead of a page of writing turned out to be just an "S". A nice trick. __________________

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10-01-2005, 07:02 PM	#3
ZeroDude Rock n' Roll Doggie Band-aid Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Belfast Posts: 4,953 Local Time: 12:16 PM	Thanks Carol

10-02-2005, 01:14 AM	#4
For Honor Rock n' Roll Doggie VIP PASS Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: East Coast, USA Posts: 5,278 Local Time: 06:16 AM	Always good to see you writing again, friend

10-02-2005, 08:48 AM	#6
ZeroDude Rock n' Roll Doggie Band-aid Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Belfast Posts: 4,953 Local Time: 12:16 PM	Thanks Jesse (FH), I'm glad I'm writing again aswell and those lines are my favorites too, I love playing on words like that, it keeps me thinking anyway