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Michael Griffiths 10-24-2000 07:30 PM

"A Dilema: Getting Lost In The Push"
 
"A Dilema: Getting Lost In The Push"

Keep going,
under the chill of this heavy
season.
I see a smile,
a wink of hope --
a face of something beyond all of this.
Feet on softness, hardness, I don't know what -- and all balance is gone, as
the doorway to my life comes crashing down,
closed --
SLAM!
and it takes so much
to open it, to begin to push it open again
So I close it off,
forgetting the face in the wind.
But I MUST not say goodbye to all that I must be
and I remember:
You must move in the same direction,
in order to get lost in its flow....

(I just wrote this in three minutes. That's probably why it's so bad!)

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The Tempest

scappy 10-25-2000 03:14 AM

Hey - it's not bad! I like it!

And I doubt I'd EVER post something I'd written in 3 minutes...my first drafts are horrid! Yours, however, are super! http://www.u2news.com/u2feedback/smile.gif

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"And it's already gone too far..."

zooropamanda 10-25-2000 06:17 AM

I see a smile,
a wink of hope --
a face of something beyond all of this

always you http://www.u2news.com/u2feedback/smile.gif

welcome my friend

Michael Griffiths 10-25-2000 07:45 PM

Scappy,

You're way too kind. You give me way too much credit -- you even assume that the rest of my first drafts are great, even though this is my first on the board! Thank-you.

Amanda,

(I assume that is your name, right? Mind if I call you that? http://www.u2news.com/u2feedback/wink.gif) Thanks for welcoming me to "poet's corner"! It's fun having people like you around cyberspace.... http://www.u2news.com/u2feedback/smile.gif

The Wanderer 10-25-2000 11:19 PM

great!! let's get some more poets in here... I know there are a lot of closet poets out there, I hope more people step up and post their poems... and if you really did this in 3 minutes, I am dying to see what you can do in 4 minutes!!!!!

and it takes so much
to open it, to begin to push it open again
So I close it off


ya, me too...



zooropamanda 10-26-2000 01:49 AM

hmmm..well perhaps you might not be a Michael...nah.....

yes, you can call me Amanda, you can call me anything you want, haha

wanderer, i hadnt even really taken in the lines that you pointed out, three like minds, huh?


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