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Old 10-15-2004, 08:50 AM   #1
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Please critique my work and spare not my feelings

It can be argued the most brilliant minds reside in FYM.
I respect all opinons here from the meat eaters to the tree huggers, ergo I beseech you to grade my work on a scale of 1-10.

Please go here, spare not my feelings and grade my work.
Tell me if my work is deadsexy or D.O.A.
I can take it.

http://forum.interference.com/t99285.html
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Old 10-15-2004, 09:00 AM   #3
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It´s very good. Keep writing!

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Its DREADSEXY
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I like it 8
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I think it's a good start, but I would continue to rewrite it and get rid of some of the cliched parts. Sorry! I know that's harsh! It's a result of having my father critique my work and telling me to get rid of my purple prose! Hard to take but later you look back and are glad the person said it. I'd give it a 7 And I am this harsh on myself too!
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Isn´t life often a cliché? Just meant as a side question.

No really, I think if you write something and it comes from your heart, it can´t be a cliché. You can´t really define a cliché. Let people critisize you, it might change your view, might even inspire you. But if you want to be a good writer, never change something for the sake of critics.

And that, Ladies and Gentlemen, is the living truth for all real artists - even for composers.
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Almost is ok because i prefer to be kissed by cute girls
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I think it's a good start, but I would continue to rewrite it and get rid of some of the cliched parts. Sorry! I know that's harsh! It's a result of having my father critique my work and telling me to get rid of my purple prose! Hard to take but later you look back and are glad the person said it. I'd give it a 7 And I am this harsh on myself too!
i thank u miss moo for your candid and frankassesment.

i see my work has had at least 55 views and hardly any comments in proportion to the views.

why are some afraid to come forward?
why, i know not.

thank u dread u animal.

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i'd like to put some music on that , Mr Diamond
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Bastard, that is a slap in the face, the worst example ever of bad poetry, your bad poetry is so damn awful at being bad poetry that is good poetry.

On my bad poetry meter where 10 is the worst poetry and 1 is the best I shall give you 1^-5. Thank you so much for this bad bad poetry.

/This confusing post is actually a compliment.
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