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Old 10-15-2004, 06:30 PM   #16
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I wish more people went and checked out stuff in DOL....I've put stuff up there and stopped because the small amount of traffic in there.
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Old 10-15-2004, 08:20 PM   #17
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Bastard, that is a slap in the face, the worst example ever of bad poetry, your bad poetry is so damn awful at being bad poetry that is good poetry.

On my bad poetry meter where 10 is the worst poetry and 1 is the best I shall give you 1^-5. Thank you so much for this bad bad poetry.

/This confusing post is actually a compliment.
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Old 10-15-2004, 10:04 PM   #18
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after reviewing

I know why that forum is not called

Read Out Loud.
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Old 10-15-2004, 10:15 PM   #19
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you misspelled daffodil. that's all

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Old 10-15-2004, 10:58 PM   #20
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Old 10-15-2004, 11:11 PM   #21
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I like it, a bit cliche, but I give it a 7.5.
And I subtract 2 for blatant self promotion on this forum.
5.5




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Old 10-15-2004, 11:14 PM   #22
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kick me harder el guapo::
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Old 10-15-2004, 11:34 PM   #23
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I jest, Diamond. I did like it! You got penalized for being shamless.

I'll add one point for having the balls to post it in public for mass critique and one point for using creative artistry. I appreciate it as someone who writes songs/lyrics constantly.

So you are refunded by your own Inner El Guapo.
Everyone has their own El Guapo to fight.
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Old 10-16-2004, 04:48 AM   #24
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el guapo,
thx makes perfect sense.

deep -
ms spellcheck
mr racer
starsgoblue, love your handle but we're stll looking for a numerical score here.

hiphop thx ol boy
winnie the deep, thx

and the rest of u who read it and forgot to post number grades
this is your loss.
your loss to participate
your loss to critique
your loss to come to the table and offer your very tiny morsels.


thank u,

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Old 10-16-2004, 07:59 AM   #25
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we're now up to 78 views.
im getting agitated by the amount of peepers here that refuse to grade my stellar work.

thank u for all the brave souls that posted their invaild veiws and assesments.
to the peepers i call u out and ask u to post damn it post i say

thank u
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Old 10-16-2004, 09:17 AM   #26
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It's very good.
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Old 10-16-2004, 10:03 AM   #27
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It's very good.
thank u souly.
thank u for coming out instead of lurking like a peeper.

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You and Bono should colaborate on their next album. Wait, he's too afraid your genius will overshadow his . Very good poem...honestly.
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Old 10-16-2004, 11:40 AM   #29
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Argh, sorry Diamond, it doesn't really do it for me.

Although I probably couldn't write something half as good myself.

I give it a 6, + 1 for having the cojones to post it for critique, fair play.

7 overall then.
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Old 10-16-2004, 11:45 AM   #30
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cool man.

thanks fellas
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