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Old 05-08-2003, 06:46 PM   #1
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It's official #poem

I am bored
Dear Lord,
Please help me
With my sanity

I thought Iíd share
This little poem
And post it on
This very forum

I think I am stuck
And canít think of any more rhymes
Maybe someone can help me
Before I go crazy

Oh! That rhymed!
And just in time
This poem isnít worth a dime
I want to go homeÖis it time?

I am bored
Dear Lord,
Please help me
This is my plea

None will forsake
This poem isnít fake
I know what youíre thinkingÖ
ďWhat has she been drinking?Ē

I know Sicy wants to eat my brainsÖ
Someone please pass the salt
It really isnít my fault
I just wanted to share a thought

I am bored
Dear Lord,
I just want to go home
And be as happy as a gnome

I canít believe youíre still reading this
Oh what bliss!
Maybe I am a poet
And I didnít even know it!

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Old 05-08-2003, 07:10 PM   #2
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Old 05-09-2003, 12:42 AM   #3
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thanks icelle!
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Old 05-09-2003, 12:45 AM   #4
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aww shucks
my poetry sucks
I guess there is a reason why
never before did I try
and no one else ever replied

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yay that cheered me up
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Old 05-09-2003, 02:34 AM   #6
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Old 05-09-2003, 02:51 AM   #7
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Good night my dear friends
Once again this day ends
Sun sets and moon rises
Maybe tomorrow poetry again I may tryses

So I couldn't think of a word that rhymed
I will try another time
I'm too sleepy now
To even know how

Boredom will come again
Who knows when it will begin
Perhaps another poem or another thought
To keep me from becoming so distraught

I am up too late once again
The insanity never ends
Draw me near as I hug you tight
In a few hours comes the morning light

good night!


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I am bored
Dear Lord,
Please help me
With my sanity

Analysis: The persona in this poem starts off by directly addressing the matter at hand, saying that he/she (we are unable to tell from the text alone) is bored. The use of the pronoun 'I' gives the line a certain personal feel, and the long vowel sound in 'bored' places further emphasis on the ennui of the persona.

The next line 'dear Lord' is an open plea to God. It is simple and direct, showing the desperation of the persona. The next two lines use this same technique - simple, direct language that is free of metaphor, with the effect of the reader completely sympathising with the persona's plight.

OK I think I'll stop there.
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Old 05-09-2003, 01:27 PM   #9
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Old 05-09-2003, 05:37 PM   #10
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Old 05-09-2003, 05:39 PM   #11
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I am bored
Dear Lord,
Please help me
With my sanity

Analysis: The persona in this poem starts off by directly addressing the matter at hand, saying that he/she (we are unable to tell from the text alone) is bored. The use of the pronoun 'I' gives the line a certain personal feel, and the long vowel sound in 'bored' places further emphasis on the ennui of the persona.

The next line 'dear Lord' is an open plea to God. It is simple and direct, showing the desperation of the persona. The next two lines use this same technique - simple, direct language that is free of metaphor, with the effect of the reader completely sympathising with the persona's plight.

OK I think I'll stop there.
Correct Analysis: it was the only thing I could think of at the time that rhymed with bored
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ok, this has been my reply in lots of threads today, but it's pretty accurate all around anyway....
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Old 05-09-2003, 05:53 PM   #13
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very beautiful

pulitizer anyone ?
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Old 05-09-2003, 05:55 PM   #14
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I nominate it for a Lemur award!
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for poetry.

yertle-the-turtle's analysis... I concur.
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