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Old 03-17-2008, 02:02 AM   #1006
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Landscapes should be in sound, i.e. UF. The words need to be about people, IMO. Hence, why I enjoy Bono's lyrics.
You can create some great landscapes that are characters if you know how to. I myself prefer to write scenes that evoke images in people's minds. A for Creative Writing tonight was about a weekend between two lovers.
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Just for fun: Something I wrote a few years back, part of a greater essay that was supposed to be entirely descriptive.

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The point of the spear flashed brilliantly in the sunlight, as its wielder wove it through a deadly dance. Ducking, weaving and twisting through a series of fluid, graceful movements, the performer handled the spear as if it were but an extension of his own body, whipping it around seemingly effortlessly. The spear finally ceased its deadly yet beautiful dance, and the performer left the stage to a thunderous ovation from the audience.
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Oh come on. I want to be engrossed in where the story is set. I don't just want "bla bla is a rural town". Describe the thing.
I spend a bit of time on it. I'm in a forest, I mention what makes that forest different from others or what's notable, and I move on.
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I'm off to bed. Alas.

G'night, folks! Thanks for letting me play in your yard.
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NEW THREAD!
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Old 03-17-2008, 02:03 AM   #1011
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EVERYTHING YOU KNOW IS WRONG
EVERYTHING AXVER KNOWS IS WRONG

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I agree. I mean, don't propose yet, but you should spend some more time with this girl!
I fully intend to, but that's because, unlike what some of you are thinking, I'm thinking "cool, somebody else who cares about trains so that I'm not a nerdy loner!"
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At the end of AIWIY, he's singing seemingly random shit, but at a couple of points, I can clearly hear "sweetest", and I'm pretty sure the next word is "thing". I think one part is "honey, sweet, love's the sweetest thing". The enunciation is just shot. I have no idea if that's a snippet or not.

If anybody else has 25/11/89 Tokyo, play AIWIY. It's a great performance anyway, complete with Sexual Healing for the girls. Tell me what you think. I'm struggling around 5:16-30.
i would if MY FUCKING ITUNES WOULD OPEN *#$%@#$&*
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Goodbye Cori, see you in whereever-the-fuck we're going next
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G'night, cori.

Come on, who's doing the new thread?
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Ian McCulloch the U2 fan:
"Who buys U2 records anyway? It's just music for plumbers and bricklayers. Bono, what a slob. You'd think with all that climbing about he does, he'd look real fit and that. But he's real fat, y'know. Reminds me of a soddin' mountain goat."
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So, is someone gonna make a new thread, or what?
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Oh come on. I want to be engrossed in where the story is set. I don't just want "bla bla is a rural town". Describe the thing.
I give those details, I just do them as needed, mixed in with the rest. and I loahte the overuse of adjectives. don't even get me started on adverbs.
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I fully intend to, but that's because, unlike what some of you are thinking, I'm thinking "cool, somebody else who cares about trains so that I'm not a nerdy loner!"
We're all just looking at it from the purity test angle.
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Seeya later, Cori!

Maj, that's pretty good, I like the conclusion but I feel there could have been more interesting ways to describe the actions. Maybe it's just because I've read too many stories that have a sort of similar theme. It was still effective, though.
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