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Old 02-14-2011, 03:09 PM   #91
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Love Doves? Good man.
Yep. Love the Doves. Been slowly getting some of their material (right now I've got Lost Souls and Kingdom of Rust, both are great albums, and some of The Last Broadcast). I think they should be better known here but hardly anyone has heard of them.
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Old 02-14-2011, 03:14 PM   #92
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Haha I know you said don't worry... but... you're lip syncing! Haha... really good job with the music though.
I had to lip sync! I'd already recorded the vocal. Is it bad? I'm wondering if I have too much reverb on the guitar and vocal tracks on Abandoned? I already got a thumbs down on YT. This actually my best sounding recording, especially regarding the mixing of the song, to date. Drums sit perfectly in the mix and everything sounds great to me and I am really proud of myself for once!
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Old 02-14-2011, 03:34 PM   #93
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I had to lip sync! I'd already recorded the vocal. Is it bad? I'm wondering if I have too much reverb on the guitar and vocal tracks on Abandoned? I already got a thumbs down on YT. This actually my best sounding recording, especially regarding the mixing of the song, to date. Drums sit perfectly in the mix and everything sounds great to me and I am really proud of myself for once!
The vocals sound good, I dunno what you're asking is bad. Nothing is bad.

But it's obvious you're lip syncing, if you were trying to hide the fact. I dunno if you actually sang it or what, but a good tip for lip syncing is to actually sing the song while lip syncing. I mean... you could've been doing that. It just looks like you're not.

You should be proud, jealous of the talent haha.
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Old 02-14-2011, 03:48 PM   #94
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I was actually singing along to the song. I didn't really care how good/bad the lip syncing was as long as it keeps people interested. As for what I thought was bad is I was asking about the overall sound of the guitar and vocals. Maybe the drums as well as I am absolutely not a drummer. I have taught myself how to keep a decent rhythm in the past couple years. I did all the parts and I love the bass line. It feels weird for me to talk about my own material as I haven't really in the past and usually try to stay off the subject with friends.
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Old 02-14-2011, 04:21 PM   #95
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Well that's a damper. That's how I feel about music in general with my friends (although I'm not talented enough to make my own, so dont ever feel bad lol what you've done is pretty good).

If you wanna talk about your own music, feel free to throw a bit at me. My ears are open, and I generally like to think I have an awesome taste in music
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Old 02-14-2011, 04:33 PM   #96
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Haha I like to think i have an awesome taste in music too. I'll probably ask your opinion on a few songs as I actually really like constructive criticism.
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Old 02-17-2011, 06:57 PM   #97
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This probably gonna be my last original for a while, maybe. It's called "Wire" and I also re-recorded this one and the quality is, once again, surprisingly great. I love when I can turn out a clear tune. The lyrics are in the video but I'll post them here. Also if you think it's maybe "bland" at first just check out the whole thing and the outro part is beautiful.

YouTube - Wire (New Session Version) [Lyrics]

Lyrics:

Early in the morning
The long night has passed
And your suffering is gone at last
You complain of the pain
But you'll soon find that the worst pain
Is nothing at all
You lose yourself in the haze
You lose yourself in this place
You know the drug you have to face

Caught by the wire
You're so deep in the fire
Some things you don't regret
And some things you don't forget
The pain that you feel inside
And yet you wonder why

Your days soon will pass
And you'll be free at last
With no one to push you away
Your world it has left you
It's crumbled underneath you
Nothing you can do


Caught by the wire
You're so deep in the fire
Some things you don't regret
And some things you don't forget
The pain that you feel inside
And yet you wonder why
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Old 02-17-2011, 07:03 PM   #98
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Outro was my favorite part, but the guitar throughout the song is also quite nice.
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Old 02-17-2011, 07:23 PM   #99
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The outro bit is a big reason I listen to it now and then. Funny thing is I was working out Radiohead's House of Cards when I came up with the rhythm guitar part. I think the tuning is a bit different though.
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Old 02-18-2011, 12:42 AM   #100
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Again good work. But I must ask, what are you shooting for? Do you just do this for fun, or do you want something more out of it?

I know you said you welcome constructive criticism, but I'd rather not be the nitpicky asshole on a web forum pointing out everything I see if you're just doing this for fun (because in the end, it's still very good, and far more than I could ever do).
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Old 02-18-2011, 01:14 AM   #101
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Not sure what I'm shooting for exactly. Part of it is for fun but not all of it is. I'm pretty much looking for general thoughts/opinions on various things such as music, lyrics, performance, sound, etc. That and I like sharing my music but like I said earlier I feel weird discussing my work, don't know if that makes sense. These songs were just some things I finished up recently and I'm really working hard on my second album after I didn't get the product I wanted with my first one. So just anything that you may feel needs tweaking on for improvement.
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Okay well, I'll give you some of my observations on your vocals/lyrics.

First off, it seems like you're going too far to make your lyrics rhyme. I really don't think that's too important. Also, the way you should try and make the vocals and instrumentals pair together a bit more. Write the lyrics to fit the instrumentals, after they're completely done. You're annunciating some words oddly. You wouldn't happen to have an accent, would you?

Also, the drums have been drowned out!
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Old 02-18-2011, 01:51 PM   #103
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Good pointers. I really have a thing for getting the lyrics to rhyme and sometimes they come off as cheesy, bad, don't make sense, or whatever. I feel like this song has a dark sort of mood to it. I wanted it to be about a drug addict or any addict really and what is happening around them and the effects it's had on their life and the end was this sort of "bloom" where their life maybe turns around.

I think the deal with how my voice turned out on the recording was the fact that I had gotten over a cold and I still felt stopped up, which is not a wise choice if you want to put forward the best product you can. I agree that the drums are also a bit quiet. I have that fear of mixing the drums too loud and tend to place them quieter. Your tips really might help as I'll try to fix some things tonight and see what I can do.
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It's my pleasure to help. Just remember, I don't intend to be offensive. Feel free to tell me off if I'm a bit too harsh lol.
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Old 02-18-2011, 02:24 PM   #105
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Oh yeah don't worry about being offensive. It's all for the better. And I probably won't tell you off unless it's like really, really extreme.
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