Still Haven't Found the Higher Ground... (dodgy working title)

[Alisaura]

As I try to lift my eyes above my soul,
I cannot see too far from what I know...
And all I know is you
All I see is you
All I have is you
All I need is you.

As I try to raise my heart above your touch,
Its earth-bound beating cracks, reveals too much...
All I love is you
All I feel is you
All I am is you
All that's real is you.

As I try in vain to regain control,
To reach a higher love - eludes me so...
But all I find is you
And all my mind is you
All that's mine is you
And all my dreams are you...

As I try to steel myself against what's real
And I'm reeling from all the things I feel
As I try to see beyond the real
And reach through what I feel
And grope for what I've never known
Exploring territory strange and overgrown
Stumbling through dark alleyways alone
Waiting for the slightest glimpse of light
As I wander aimless sightless in the night
A soul that's lost, in need of saving
Thinks it's satisfied, but craving
"Where? Where for art thou?
How am I to find you, how?"
What is it that I'm looking for?
Why is it I need something more?
What in me's craving more that's true
When all
I want
Is you?

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(I should point out that I'm not sure what it means, and it's not autobiographical... I think. One of those Woke-up-with-a-couple-of-lines-in-my-head-and-it-GREW things...)

 

[zoo@2]

AWESOME POEM!!!!!!
GREAT WRITING!!!

- It kinda describes the way I'm feeling right now towards this particular female. It has inspired me alittle, and hopefully I will take some action!!

zoo

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Be Uncool
Yes be awkward
Don't look in the obvious place
A Soul needs beautiful a soul mate
-Always

 

[BabyGrace]

wow!! that poem can mean so much and it's so perfect emotionally..

love it

 

[Alisaura]

Thanks guys...

Anyone got ideas on another title? That one really sucks...

The other part I was concerned about was the Real/Feel repetitiveness at the start of the long bit, and the way the rhythm keeps changing... I could do a cop-out and pretend I did it on purpose to convey some sort of irregularity and so on, and maybe in my subconcious I did, but it still bugs me a bit.

The other thing is, I read scatteroflight's (I think that's the author!) poem about a believer and an atheist just before I posted this, and that kind of struck a chord, cos when I was writing this I kind of had a feeling like it was someone trying to leave earthly love behind for Higher Love, or something... I don't really know, but I didn't capitalise that in the poem cos I think I prefer it to me ambiguous in its interpretation...
*shrug*
Am I full of hot air or what!
(I wish I was actually, it's cold today!)

By the way, good luck, zoo@2!

[This message has been edited by Alisaura (edited 04-23-2001).]

 

[Bacchus]

Makes me feel like one of those "it's 4 am and i'm still aLIVE" moments to me...

Simply breath taking; thank you...