shallow scorn underneath your w

[zooropamanda]

shallow scorn underneath your wind and sun
hum
failing pieces trickle under tongue
hum hum
hum
I I I aye aye
IiiiiiaaahhI
want to be the one you walk with
share your dreams
alone

an echoed morning blasted light
frees upon my riverbed of fun
hum
ohhh i watch as let go
shadows and desyre
caught under the fyre
leading out this time
into a darkness of pale moonlight

our grace entwined
dreams unwind
I just want to live my life
to face the day
without your name
brings a tear into my eye

i want to laugh again with you
hum
however weak that makes me
hum de hum
a twisted leaf blows underfoot
windy walks alone with the songs in my head
maybe that is where you'll stay
alone that way
with me and my mind


[This message has been edited by zooropamanda (edited 05-17-2001).]

 

[Angela Harlem]

Oh geeeez, sorry manda, Im sure this is a great poem, but I can't read it for laughing!!!!

hahahaha


Soooo sorry......

 

[Bacchus]

Sweet laughter is the greatest medicine, though your words ring true, i share your feelings Zoo, Thank you so much for filling the wire with such beautiful sounds

[/B]"Breathe when you breathe,
Walk where you walk.
talk when you talk,
cry when you cry,
die when you die,
let go when you let go..."
...Allen Ginsberg
[/B]

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The heart that is soonest awake to the flowers is always the first to be touched by the thorns.
Thomas Moore, 1779?1852

 

[BabyGrace]

I love your poetry ZooManda.

you can write any way you want...

although the last stanza, beautiful as it is, hurts

[This message has been edited by BabyGrace (edited 05-21-2001).]

 

[Salome]

Originally posted by zooropamanda:
i want to laugh again with you
hum
however weak that makes me
hum de hum
a twisted leaf blows underfoot
windy walks alone with the songs in my head
maybe that is where you'll stay
alone that way
[This message has been edited by zooropamanda (edited 05-17-2001).]

sheer beauty

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Salome
Shake it, shake it, shake it

 

[popkidu2]

hum de hum

the musings of a battered soul

creates the image of a person sitting on the rocks next to the ocean muttering out loud to the sea

very nice

 

[travu2]

Wow.. I think this is a very bold and inventive poem. The sounds that you interject, and the way you use them, caused me to look at the surrounding words in a different way, and they seem to give the poet more life. It's like they expand the palette of emotions. The fact that you pull it off so eloquently makes me think that you were definitely "in the moment" when you wrote this. Thank you for not being afraid to do something different.

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"Words are very unnecessary. They can only do harm."

Depeche Mode

 

[zooropamanda]

thanks guys
nevermind angie, she was just gigling at my silly title goof up.

Trav, actually, you're right about the moment thing. I cant believe Im admitting this but I was actually singing it. It came out as it was sung and I just left it that way.
I guess thats what the Iiiiaahh parts are..

Sometimes it makes more sense to write nonsense. In the words of Liam Gallagher, "know what I mean?".

 

[Angela Harlem]

Thanks Manda. You know Ive never thought badly of anything you've written. And would never in a million years laugh at what you write.
You people in here have more guts than lil old me will ever have. Even in the brave anonimity of the net, its still exposing yourself. And in this way, its the deepest feelings, or your truest, purest thoughts.