nameless poem thing

Loafer · 01-13-2001, 10:27 PM

Green tile floor scrubbed sparkling clean
Slick as dew, in its glare I see you
Staring down at me
Behind my back, a wraith on my shoulder
Is it clean enough for you?
Can�t you see yourself as well as you see me?
Your still form, watching, looking, evaluating, measuring
Never revealing
What I leave bare for the world to see
And so I scrub and I sweep and try to please
But I�ll never know just how you feel
And you�ll know everything there is to know
about me.

[This message has been edited by Loafer (edited 01-13-2001).]

frogbat · 01-14-2001, 04:20 AM

hey Loafer, s'been a while

very interesting metaphor and imagery

DancingBarefoot · 01-14-2001, 04:56 PM

Very nice, loafer. I like this a lot.

------------------
Nichelle
**Still looking for the
face I had before the
world was made....**

**Work like you don't
need money, love like
you've never been hurt,
and dance like no
one's watching.**

01-13-2001, 10:27 PM	#1
Loafer The Fly Join Date: Jul 2000 Location: LA, CA, USA Posts: 48 Local Time: 11:24 AM	nameless poem thing Green tile floor scrubbed sparkling clean Slick as dew, in its glare I see you Staring down at me Behind my back, a wraith on my shoulder Is it clean enough for you? Can�t you see yourself as well as you see me? Your still form, watching, looking, evaluating, measuring Never revealing What I leave bare for the world to see And so I scrub and I sweep and try to please But I�ll never know just how you feel And you�ll know everything there is to know about me. [This message has been edited by Loafer (edited 01-13-2001).] __________________

01-14-2001, 04:20 AM	#2
frogbat The Fly Join Date: Jul 2000 Posts: 290 Local Time: 11:24 AM	hey Loafer, s'been a while very interesting metaphor and imagery __________________

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01-14-2001, 04:56 PM	#3
DancingBarefoot The Fly Join Date: Nov 2000 Location: Houston, TX USA Posts: 133 Local Time: 06:24 AM	Very nice, loafer. I like this a lot. ------------------ Nichelle Still looking for the face I had before the world was made.... Work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt, and dance like no one's watching.