my love

[blueyedpoet]

Just to see one more time
the beauty, the flair
I could try to be perfect
and still it falls of who you are
the phone stays glued to my ear
even when the goodbyes are over

And it’s always so long
I’m so tired of crying
...wasted in my tears
detoxing on the space between our hearts
set the table for two of the coastly fog

you are beautiful, so beautiful
the beauty, the flair
you’re beautiful, so beautiful

I can’t believe that you love me this way
it’s so hard to believe you adore me
I still can’t believe you want
you want me

you are beautiful, so beautiful
the beauty, the flair
you’re beautiful, so beautiful

 

[ZeroDude]

Short but sweet

 

[blueyedpoet]

thanks...i don't know if i like the "Can't believe" parts

 

[ZeroDude]

I see what you mean it's a bit stilted imo compared to the rest of it, maybe the repetition of believe is the main problem although repetition is useful to get the ideas or views in your work across to the audience it can be detrimental, but if you want do you can change that if you feel the need