Love Sickness

[Achtung_Bebe]

Warm, fuzzy feeling,
Thick as honey,
Sweetening my flesh.
If only it would flow as slow,
To please my love obsess.
Nature-defying urge,
Creeping in as daylight,
Streaming rays of gold,
Never setting as sun might.
The first word he'd spoken,
To shatter on the floor.
The state things take,
When loving words break...
Just leaves you wanting more.
Collecting the shards now,
A mosaic so as to make--
Piece work puzzle put
Smiling eyes and butterflies
In the pit of my stomach.

This swirling sensation enough
To make me ill
Yet I love you still...
Love sickness--

 

[The Wanderer]

I think this is one of your best ever in here Bebe, great rhyme and rhythm, and not bad with the metaphors either

really like those opening lines quite a bit...

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As the fuel goes down
Stops the car
Puts her feet outside in the rain
She's back on the machine
But it's sweet so far away...

splippin' away...

 

[EdgeVox]

.....sincerely that's one of the coolest things I've read....

 

[Salome]

definite thumbs up for this one

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Salome
Shake it, shake it, shake it

 

[BabyGrace]

I have to agree with Wanderer on this one..

Collecting the shards now,
A mosaic so as to make--
Piece work puzzle put
Smiling eyes and butterflies
In the pit of my stomach

awesome stuff Bebe!

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but for the grace of love I'd will the meaning of heaven from above...

 

[Angel]

Originally posted by Achtung_Bebe:
This swirling sensation enough
To make me ill
Yet I love you still...
Love sickness--

Beautiful.



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"It's no secret that our world is in darkness tonight..."

 

[EdgeVox]

Doesn't Bebe rock