Losing You

[tackleberry]

I just finished this last night. I could really use your feedback.


"Losing You"

My love she throws me like a rubber ball
She won't catch me or break my fall
Baby's got blue skies up ahead
But in ths I'm a rain cloud
You know she wants a dry kind of love

I'm losing you
I'm losing you
Ain't love the sweetest thing

I wanted to run but she made me crawl
Eternal fire, she turned me to straw
I know I got black eyes
But they burn so brightly for her
I guess its a blind kind of love

I'm losing you
I'm losing you
Ain't love the sweetest thing

Blue eyed boy meets a brown eyed girl
You can sew it up but you still see the tear
Baby's(or honey's or sugar's) got blue skies up ahead
But in this I'm a rain(or storm) cloud
Our's is a stormy(or rainy) kind of love

So whatcha think?? I was thinking of calling it "Sweetest Thing" but not sure if that works.

 

[adamswildhoney]

it is called the sweetest thing!

 

[famous rungi]

obviously great minds think alike