Kisses Indicate

[Jabble524]

Hello, it's great to have found a community of fellow U2 fans. U2 has always been of great inspiration to me. I've posted two poems- the first is about romance, and the second is about unnecessary war and violence caused by the government. I'd love feedback if anyone has the time.
Cheers, Jason...

1) Kisses Indicate

I can leave the place where time stops
Just outside reality
I can leave the place where time stops
Material paradise vanishes

Censored screams whispered
They're spectacular with the vernacular of confusion
Kisses indicate the illusion
There's correlations between your lacerations

Watch the sunrise
And fall asleep in your arms
Coffee kisses at sunset
And wake me from my dreams

Censored screams whispered
They're spectacular with the vernacular of confusion
Kisses indicate the illusion
There's correlations between your lacerations

2) Validate

Poisonous perspectives
Not labeled lucrative
But where's the validation
Was it just an estimation

Abstract and ambiguous
Amorphous and exclusive

Optimal through greed's opticals
Your perspectives keep us frozen
They mutate the mirage
To influence their opulence

Abstract and ambiguous
Amorphous and exclusive

Acceptance without thought
MySpace.com - Jabble - 24 - Male - WOODBRIDGE, Virginia - www.myspace.com/jabble524

 

[BonoFox1]

Those are very nice!!! I had to get my dictionary for a couple of words but otherwise VERY NICE!