infinitely unreasonable

[korey]

sometimes i wonder what it would be like to love anyone else
it seems so odd that i would feel this about anyone, but you...
are the embodiment of all that i love about life- loving someone
(else would seem hypocritical)
you are what love is to me. letting myself let go seems
i n f i n i t e l y u n r e a s o n a b l e ,
why would i want to get rid of what makes my life.
(hurt so good)?
its what gives me conviction. my hopes-
i tried to deny wanting forever have been
(closed), so where will i find he...
who can love me? i wish i could love someone else,
right now, love doesnt care who it hurts. if love unreturned, full
of pain hurts so good, i look forward to the day
when my love is. (returned).

 

[korey]

this is my first attempt at a poem, so give me some constructive critisizm.

 

[korey]

hey, anyone out there? any reply to let me know if you like it or not, i'd appreciate it.

 

[Sicy]

Dream Out Loud is a slow forum.

You cant expect to get tons of replies in a matter of minutes here.

Plus lots of people read this forum but dont always comment.

I thought your poem was nice.

 

[korey]

thank you for replying, and for the bit of advice. this is my first time on a forum, or writing anything for that matter- i have no idea how things work, so thanks

 

[Sicy]

No problem... maybe you should check out the faqs at the top right hand corner of the forum. It's very helpful for new people.

 

[LarryMullen's POPAngel]

It is a bit slow in here, but we are here.

 

[korey]

its really kind of discouraging to put something your pour your heart into on a forum and have no one respond to it. dont just read, reply, please.

 

[cell]

i felt like that too korey, where i would pour my heart out into my poems on here and i would get no replies on one or two that i wrote...its just really slow in here. its always been that way.

and i liked your poem too