faith

[ACROB@T]

~smothered by memory?porcelain veins eclipsed~..
echoed in collapsed denial....its hidden lie betrays its cancer~
~hollow roots rising in comprehension..each desire lost under another
~absorbed in darkness,..left drowned in admiration..
night torn open..where whispered rain bled through...
..falling distant..settling on faithful ground~
~caressed by silhouetted hope
..where knowing was never denied
when he could never look away..
..never burn his gaze from her shadow
never taint the blood in his eyes..
..pale as it writhes over dew soaked stones
drowning in doubt under a falling sunset..
its ghost striking distant eyes
~morning left to tarnish its rage~.
its satin needle splintering within an absent mind
never to put trust upon his own beliefs
faded under a belief in trust~..

 

[Zoomerang96]

im not gonna lie to you or even attempt to try and make it look like i understood what your poem is all about...

but

it does APPEAR to be quite well written, a very neat style that is certainly unique at least to the forum.

again, when people use such big terms in their poems, i lose sight easily of what the author is trying to say.

i trust what your saying is beautiful.

 

[BabyGrace]

gosh you have a way of putting the most gorgeous lines together.

bear, there's a lot of stuff I miss too at times- or see completely differently. a lot of it is about the atmosphere the poem creates, and there are people in here that are really good at doing it. the great thing about poetry really, is how people can see such different messages in it.

 

[zooropamanda]

"when he could never look away..
..never burn his gaze from her shadow "

oh my goodness
just gorgeous acro
i adore those lines

bear is right, you deifnitely have your own style unlike anyone else here.