This is my first time in here, on recommition on LCk 
I write allot, cause my friends likes to sing and I promised her to write her lyrics, though she doens't have a band to play the music. I also write stories but I write those in dutch so I won't post em'.
Well, here's a piece of lyric I still have to finish.
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This is the day that I dare you to dream
Trust me it isn't as hard as it seems
Just close your eyes there is nothing to fear
Live in you dreams and heaven'll be near
***
Well, that's all, but I like this one since she thought it already was a lyric. (like one from an excisting song)
Some more poem/lyric:
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So here we are
We're sittin in a room
We'll be talking later
But ow soon
And there it stabs me
Quiet
Everyone knows
That the nightmares come
When you whole alone
No one there to help
Though you are here but we're
Quiet
They are here
My nightmares run into the room
But you won't help
Why won't you talk
Now the nightmares come
Quiet
It isn't night
Though they are here
I start to cry
And you look up
But you won't talk
Quiet
I'm whole alone
While you are here
Why won't you talk
I'm alone when it's so quiet
You won't talk and it's so
Quiet
***
***
I'm so tired
I'm tired talking
I just can't go on
We gotta stop
You've just gone too far
I don't wanna talk
I want you out of this place
Leavew my heart get out of here
Sure I feel the tears
But I can't keep crying
So get out of my face
Get out before I change my mind again
Get out now I still can
Please
Get out of my face
Get out of this place
Leave me alone with my tears
Alone again
But free of pain
And free of fear
Alone again
Don't wanna talk
Just want you out
Alone again
But I'm so tired
Just wanna be
Alone again
***
I'd like it if you could give critism, cause I know full well it's far from perfect and still need to work a lot on it.
I write allot, cause my friends likes to sing and I promised her to write her lyrics, though she doens't have a band to play the music. I also write stories but I write those in dutch so I won't post em'.
Well, here's a piece of lyric I still have to finish.
***
This is the day that I dare you to dream
Trust me it isn't as hard as it seems
Just close your eyes there is nothing to fear
Live in you dreams and heaven'll be near
***
Well, that's all, but I like this one since she thought it already was a lyric. (like one from an excisting song)
Some more poem/lyric:
***
So here we are
We're sittin in a room
We'll be talking later
But ow soon
And there it stabs me
Quiet
Everyone knows
That the nightmares come
When you whole alone
No one there to help
Though you are here but we're
Quiet
They are here
My nightmares run into the room
But you won't help
Why won't you talk
Now the nightmares come
Quiet
It isn't night
Though they are here
I start to cry
And you look up
But you won't talk
Quiet
I'm whole alone
While you are here
Why won't you talk
I'm alone when it's so quiet
You won't talk and it's so
Quiet
***
***
I'm so tired
I'm tired talking
I just can't go on
We gotta stop
You've just gone too far
I don't wanna talk
I want you out of this place
Leavew my heart get out of here
Sure I feel the tears
But I can't keep crying
So get out of my face
Get out before I change my mind again
Get out now I still can
Please
Get out of my face
Get out of this place
Leave me alone with my tears
Alone again
But free of pain
And free of fear
Alone again
Don't wanna talk
Just want you out
Alone again
But I'm so tired
Just wanna be
Alone again
***
I'd like it if you could give critism, cause I know full well it's far from perfect and still need to work a lot on it.
Very good. Sorry, not much of a critical thinker at the moment. I'm trying to write an essay. However, your poems are very good!
