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Old 01-05-2001, 07:05 PM   #1
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Boy in Men's Clothing

Boy in Menís Clothing


You say that I donít know you

But how can I when youíve locked the doors and windows tight,
And youíve pulled the shades down low?

I only know what I can see on the outside,
From beyond the high stone wall.

And what I see is a boy in menís clothing.

Allowing only the weaker to enter,
For fear the strong may force him to look in one of his many mirrors.

The boy I see wears his honesty like a mask,
Understands little but knows all.

The boy I see walks away from triumph to bathe in failure.
He walks a narrow path that leads only to the open sea.

The boy I see could be a man
If he opened the windows and tore down the wall.

If he allowed the mirror to be held to his face
After the mask is off.

If he walked that narrow path to triumph
With humility.

The boy I see could be a man
That I would want to know.

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I remember how mad I was at my brother when I wrote this one. Yikes. I realize my family is often the inspiration for poems. I think because I am passionate in my caring for them and in my anger toward them. My brother is the only person in the world who can make me mad enough to want to hit something. I love him dearly, and I must say he's done a lot of growing since I wrote this.




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Nichelle
**Still looking for the
face I had before the
world was made....**

**Work like you don't
need money, love like
you've never been hurt,
and dance like no
one's watching.**
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Old 01-06-2001, 10:32 AM   #2
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I don't have a brother but I can understand your feeling...
I could swear guys mature slower than girls
This is a beautiful piece:

Allowing the weaker to enter,
For fear the strong may force him to look in one of his many mirrors.

The boy I see wears his honesty like a mask,
Understands little but knows all.


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Talk without speaking
Scream without raising your voice..."
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Old 01-07-2001, 08:49 AM   #3
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Without your epilogue, I thought this was about an un-reached love... it's crazy, isn't it, how writing can be read so many different ways.

I haven't allowed myself to write about my family yet- too many feelings there, ya know? But thank you for putting this up- its a good reminder for me that some of our best writing comes from -> <- 'there', right?

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Old 01-07-2001, 10:51 PM   #4
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I can honestly say I've never written a poem with a family member in mind

maybe I should try it sometime

The boy I see could be a man
That I would want to know.


very powerful closing

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