astronaut in the park

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travu2

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a sea of fossils
I.

Odd little astronauts
conduct sobering spacewalks.

And even with the weather
preoccupied as it is,

they continue to spin their pinwheels.

II.

Insects are quietly spiraling
under the street lights.
Pale cacti are on display,
and every window is dark.

Front yards are overrun
with ghost-town barnacles
that drift up the mountainside
from a sea of stars and fossils.

Little astronaut sitting
on the moonlit rocks, listening
to their blind scraping
down in the shadows.

III.

There is an old landfill
far from the highway.
There is a shallow pool
of electric light.

A faint breeze is rustling
the weeds that grow
from the gray strata,
where crickets are chirping

and a broken phone line is still
leaking the voice of a shy girl.

IV.

There?s a bench in the park,
under the trees,
where she used to sleep,

where she once saw
an astronaut floating
through the tall grass.

V.

She?s feeling small outside that house,
her tiny lung left exposed
on her bed.

Everywhere the wind is kissing
with nature, and she is lost
somewhere in its grassy halls.

Every other piece of the world
is communicating without her;
she can feel its tendrils in the summer.

VI.

A leafy branch is writhing in the street.
And as the yellow ants quietly
repair her dreaming parents,
her body is channeled between
their treated pools,
through a cool wash, alongside
the ragweed,
slowly coming to rest
with the simple things around the drain.

She has always been a glacier
hiding at the back of their busy valley.

VII.

In the peripheral neighborhood
just before light comes back on tour
from some sluggish, dust-moat country,
when you can still find
the working parts of dreams
scrambling up
through a dewy mesh of air,

she can only feel
an astronaut?s blank stare,
as it plucks the pearl
from her heavenly body.

VIII.

Odd little astronauts
conduct sobering spacewalks.

And no matter how hard she tries
to communicate with you,

they continue to spin their pinwheels.
 
Originally posted by travu2:


Front yards are overrun
with ghost-town barnacles
that drift up the mountainside
from a sea of stars and fossils.

VII.

In the peripheral neighborhood
just before light comes back on tour
from some sluggish, dust-moat country,
when you can still find
the working parts of dreams
scrambling up
through a dewy mesh of air,

she can only feel
an astronaut?s blank stare,
as it plucks the pearl
from her heavenly body.
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Your poems are so good...this one has moments of beauty like the ones above, it's also a little comical ("odd little astronauts") but sinister, somehow...I will read it again tomorrow and I'm sure I'll get more from it. Have you tried getting your poems published? If not, you should...they are really excellent.

Now that you're here
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I wanted to ask--some time ago you offered yourself as a guinea pig (with photographic documentation) to send off to u2worldtours.com for a bootleg--all they wanted was an Amnesty donation and the shipping paid. Did you try it, and did you get the bootleg??

Oh, and one more thing--what is the preoccupation with parks in your poetry?
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[This message has been edited by scatteroflight (edited 05-18-2001).]
 
Thanks a lot for the kind words, scatteroflight. I think it would be great to have my poems published, but I don't really think they're good enough.. maybe in the future I'll give it a try.

Sorry, I forgot about the worldtours thing for a while there. Nope, they have not sent me my boot. I am one sad guinea pig.
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I included a little note with my email address as well as the 2 money orders, but no word at all. I'm going to try to contact them.

I don't really know why parks keep popping up. I was purposely trying to think of another title for this one just for a change, but "astronaut in the park" seemed like the best one. If I post another poem here, I'll be sure it has nothing to do with parks.
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[This message has been edited by travu2 (edited 05-19-2001).]
 
this is really excellent, travu2. i am very impressed by you!

wow.

i don't read much in this poetry forum, but i am very glad i read yours today (thanks to the title). i will definitely read it again a few times.
i hope you post more work soon. i'll look for your name again.

thanks.
 
travu2, that was some excellent stuff! thank you very much for sharing and please continue to do so
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there's so much that can be read into your poetry; I'm a sucker for that kinda thing
 
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